初中英语九年级主题作文【知识框架+佳作赏析+能力提升】健康与安全.docx

主题：健康与安全导读本综合训练的主题是健康与安全.当前,党和政府高度重视人民的健康安全,多次强调保障食品、药品安全等的重要性.因此,健康与安全属于热点和长效性话题,这方面的英语写作通常涉及以下角度：从校园、交通、家庭、网络等方面谈论中学生在日常生活中如何保证自身安全；谈论健康的重要性及如何保持健康；谈论用眼卫生及保护视力等.题目回放一健康和安全是我们成长的基石,也是我们学习的保障.你所在的学校正在开展关于“美丽校园,健康生活”的活动.请你自拟标题,用英语写一篇短文,谈谈你对保护校园环境的建议.写作要求：1.文中不要出现你的真实姓名和校名；2.词数90左右.审题指引1 审体裁：说明文.2 审内容：首先点出保护校园环境的重要性以引出主题,然后说明如何保护校园环境,最后呼应主题.3 审时态：以一般现在时为主.4审人称：以第一人称为主.框架设计开头：开篇点题,简单阐明保护校园环境的重要性.中间：说明应该怎么做才能保护校园环境.结尾：总结,呼应主题.段落素描1. First paragraph: Most schoolchildren hope to have a healthy school environment, which offers...(...)2. The body: To create a good school environment, we must... Besides, we are supposed to ... Most importantly, we need to ...(...)3. Last paragraph: If we can do these well, we will...(...)范本淬炼Maintaining a good school environmentMost schoolchildren hope to have a healthy school environment,① which offers a comfortable place for their studies and school life. ② To create a good school environment, we must set strict school rules so that no one can ③ destroy the school environment. Besides, we are supposed to keep our school clean, and do not allow anyone to ④ litter or spit. Most importantly, we need to plant more trees and flowers, which will create fresher air and make our school more beautiful. If we can do these well, we will ⑤ maintain a harmonious school environment, and enjoy a happy and healthy school life.①which引导非限制性定语从句；offer,提供.② to create...,动词不定式表目的.③destroy,破坏.④ litter or spit,乱扔垃圾或随地吐痰.⑤ maintain a harmonious school environment维护和谐的学校环境.亮点点评1.开篇点明主题,中间主体段落阐述为创设良好的校园环境必须做的事,尾段再次照应主题.全文紧扣主题,首尾呼应,条理清晰.2.中间主体段落用 besides, most importantly 等衔接语,使文章连贯通顺.3.文中使用含定语从句、状语从句的主从复合句,丰富了文章句式.4.文中运用 offer, create, destroy, harmonious 等丰富词汇,给文章添彩.题目回放二为提醒广大青少年重视保护视力,某英语报正在开展以Saving our eyesight为题的征文活动.请根据以下写作提示写一篇英语短文用于投稿,说明造成青少年近视的原因并提出保护视力的合理建议.写作提示：read in wrong places, spend too much time doing the homework or using electronic products写作要求：1.语句通顺,意思连贯,语法正确,书写规范；2.写作提示必须全部用上,并作适当发挥；3.文中不得出现你的真实姓名和校名；4.90词左右.审题指引1 审体裁：说明文.2 审内容：说明造成中学生近视的原因,然后提出保护视力的建议.3 审时态：以一般现在时为主.4审人称：以第一人称和第三人称为主.框架设计开头：从学生的视力健康问题出发,引出主题.中间：从不同角度描述导致学生近视的主要原因.结尾：提出保护视力的建议.段落素描1.First paragraph: According to a report, over 50% of the students ...have a poor eyesight.(...)2. The body: The students' bad eyesight is mainly due to the unhealthy habits of using their eyes. First of all, ... Second,...(...)3.Last paragraph: To protect our eyes, we should learn how to use our eyes correctly. First, we must ... More importantly, we need...(...)范本淬炼Saving our eyesight① According to a report, over 50% of the students from high schools and ② higher education institutions have a poor eyesight.The students' bad eyesight is mainly ③ due to the unhealthy habits of using their eyes. First of all, many of them read in wrong places,④ such as on the bed, on the bus, and in bright sunlight. Second, a large number of students ⑤ spend too much time doing their homework or using electronic products, but little time taking exercise or doing outdoor activities.⑥ To protect our eyes, we should learn how to use our eyes correctly. First, we must read in a right place. ⑦ More importantly, we need to spend more time taking exercise or doing outdoor activities after school, and spend ⑧ less time using mobile phones, computers and other electronic products. ① according to,根据.② higher education institutions,高等教育机构.③due to,由于.④such as,比如.⑤ spend too much time doing sth.,花费太多时间做某事.⑥ to protect...是动词不定式,表目的.⑦ more importantly,更重要的是.⑧ less time,更少的时间.亮点点评1.文章设计了三个段落,结构清晰,层次分明.首段简述学生视力存在的问题,第二段叙述原因,尾段提出建议.2.文中使用了due to充当表语,spend time doing sth.结构,以及动词不定式充当目的状语等句式,使文章读起来很顺畅.3.文中使用了 according to, first of all, second, but, more importantly等用语,使句子和段落衔接自然.4.遣词造句准确,如列举原因时用mainly一词,使陈述较为客观；用 spend too much time ...,but litle time...进行对比,逻辑严密.素材宝库1.好词妙语stay up熬夜put on weight 增肥lose weight 减肥food safety 食品安全be short of exercise 缺乏锻炼keep healthy 保持健康keep away from 远离protect oneself 保护自己a waste of time 浪费时间keep a balanced diet 保持均衡饮食pay more attention to... 更加关注·.....have a bad influence on ...对···.··有不良影响develop a good habit of...养成一个··.···的好习惯2.提分佳句Life is so valuable that we should take it seriously. 生命如此宝贵,我们应当认真对待它.Health comes first on the way to success, and you should pay more attention to it.在通往成功的道路上,健康是第一位的,你应该多关注它.We all know that it is very important to keep healthy. Without it, everything is meaningless. 我们都知道,保持健康非常重要.没有健康,一切都是无意义的.Healthy food can give us energy and help us build up our body.健康食物能给我们提供能量,帮助我们强健体格.As time goes by, sports are playing a more and more important role in people's life. 随着时间的推移,运动在人们生活中的作用越来越重要.Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise. 早睡早起使人健康、富有和聪明.Following these ways, I will surely be able to protect myself from being hurt. 遵照这些方法,我定将能保护自己免受伤害.We。