改英语作文中目睹之怪现象.ppt

Comment on composition• Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will by commenting on the humorous saying, “Quitting smoking is the easiest thing in the world. I've done it hundreds of times.“ You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.改作文中目睹之怪现象• 偏题（戒烟） • 不评论 humorous saying改作文中目睹之怪现象• 句子结构 （只有半句话、动词缺失、一句话出 现两个动词） • The naked “动词”（第三人称单数、时态） • 断句：大小写、标点 （the flood of words) • 词性：You will success in the end.You will achieve succeed in the end.改作文中目睹之怪现象• Such as，because 继续宣布独立。

• However，so， which, so that 变成了外能粘合 剂，继续出现在不应该出现的地方 • It, that, this, something, thing 依旧漫天飞舞 • Spelling： the mutation of words • Take, make, do, good ,bad :身临其境的唐人街 style.Progress starts with realizing your mistakes • One mistake = -1 point 相关表述 • 坚持做 • 抵制诱惑 • 追求成功 • 实现目标 • 前提条件 • 克服困难 • 坚定的决心• Persist in doing (perseverance) • Resist temptation • Pursue success • Realize /achieve goals • Precondition • Overcome difficulties • Strong （firm） determination/resolution/willIf we have a strong will, we must be successful.有句话是这样说的：“有志者，事竟成！ ”• Among young people, there is a humorous saying that “quitting smoking…” • As a famous proverb goes （says), “where there is a will,…” • There is an old proverb that says “where…” • There is an old saying: where there is a will, there is a way. • An old proverb says that where … • “Where there is a will, there is a way” is an old proverb which almost everyone knows. But not every one understand its meaning.论证观点类作文的经典句型• 双重否定句： No great work can be performed without will. • 强调句型：It is long years of will and constant effort that have brought about their success. • 类比：Just as we can’t reach the top of a mountain without climbing, we can’t achieve success without will. • A strong will is of great importance (essential) to our success.结尾段• As long as we stick to our goals and do not give up easily, eventually we will realize our dream. • A strong will do not guarantee success, but this quality (instead of it) surely can land you closer to your dreams. • Only if we have a strong will can we achieve our dreams. • 1. 上网上瘾 be addicted to the Internet • 2. 沉溺于虚拟世界 indulge/immerse oneself in the virtual world • 3. 娱乐过度 excessive recreation • 4. 参加体育锻炼 engage in / take part in sports/ (exercise/physical) activities • 5. 适度进行娱乐 reasonable engagement in recreational activities spend a reasonable amount of time on recreational activities • 6. 耽误学业 affect our study / exert a bad influence on our study • 7. 合理安排 （好好利用）时间 arrange our time by reason make good use of our time • 8. 平衡娱乐与学习 strike/keep a balance between entertainment and study • 9. 对我们有益 benefit us / be beneficial to us • 10. 对我们有害 harm us be harmful to us • 11. 还有一部分人认为 others think • 12. 锻炼能力 enhance/improve ability • 13. 双方观点都有一定道理。

Both views may contain some truth. Both views are reasonable to a certain degree. • 14. 制定相关法律 draw up/enact related law最后的叮嘱• 模板和经典句型（见邮箱） • 目标：表意清晰，没有错误！。