译林版九年级英语上册《Unit 5 Art World》-牛津教学.ppt

TaskLearning Aims By the end of class, we students are expected to1.Find out highlights and problems in our own writing as well as our peers while fulfilling some tasks.2. focus on writing problems of contents and languages, such as the lack of details about ideas, poor word choices and boring sentences, etc.3.improve our oral and written ability in evaluating(评估) and improving both our pieces and others, especially editing our own first drafts.What problems of writing will be mainly solved?I like art best Both my teachers and classmates think I am able to sing well because I have a gift for singing. I began to learn my first song Twinkle, twinkle, little star when I was six years old. At that time I found that singing was such an interesting thing, up to now, I have learned over two hundred songs. In my spare time, I often sing songs to others. Everyone is happy to be my listeners, because of my passion and confidence. Even though I cannot be a professional singer, I still get a lot of fun from singing. Because of singing, my life becomes more colourful.Lets review if the piece is finished well enough.一.查作品完成度Does the writer manage to tell readerswhat art form he likes best?whether he is good at this art from?when he became interested in this art form?whether he has any stories about this art form?How important this art from is to him?Adapted from the questionnaire in the text bookLets check if the writer finishes the writing taskGood organizationCharacteristics of good writingGood writingFine languageEnough contents二.评作品成熟度I like art best Both my teachers and classmates think I am able to sing well because I have a gift for singing. I began to learn my first song Twinkle, twinkle, little star when I was six years old. At that time I found that singing was such an interesting thing, up to now, I have learned over two hundred songs. In my spare time, I often sing songs to others. Everyone is happy to be my listeners, because of my passion and confidence. Even though I cannot be a professional singer, I still get a lot of fun from singing. Because of singing, my life becomes more colourful.二评作品成熟度结构: 1.文章段落是否清晰易读? 2分 2.文章开头是否吸引读者? 1分 3.文章结构是否有所感悟? 1分内容: 1.文章是否讲述故事而非告诉事情? 3分 2.文章是否有生动情节和细节描写? 3分 3.文章全部内容是否与主题密切相关?2分语言: 1.文章是否有令人眼前一亮的用词? 3分 2.文章是否有句子尝试创 造画面感? 3分 3.文章是否借鉴了教材中的语言? 2分Lets review if the piece is finished well enough.三.赏同伴好作品 The art form I like bestCalligraphy is a kind of beautiful handwriting I like best. However, I couldnt enjoy its charm years ago, “Just so so”. I thought to myself. On a hot, noisy summer afternoon , my father showed me lots of calligraphy works he wrote when he was 11. “For what?” I asked. “Teach you to learn the art of calligraphy.” he looked at me, smiling. “Ha-ha, is it of any value to a busy student like a bee?” I couldnt help laughing. My father didnt say a word. He just put a piece of rice paper on the table and picked up a Chinese writing brush. He was so serious that I even felt everything got quieter at that moment. Also I realized something surprising was to take me to another fantastic world I had never been to-I was completely attracted by its magic. So AMAZING. It was from that afternoon that I started to learn calligraphy from my father and gradually lost myself in the art form, which taught me to keep peace and simple in the heart no matter what was happening outside. By zhonglong 三.赏同伴好作品The art form I like best1.Does the writer use any details to make the story more interesting or easier to understand?2.Does the writer use any specific effective or memorable words to tell the story?3.Do any students help to create pictures in your mind when you are reading the story?4.4.-Lets appreciate, and learn from our peers piece.三.赏同伴好作品1. Show enough details instead of telling a fact.2. Use good words or sentences to create pictures.3.- In this way, you can make the piece more interesting toread or much easier to understand. In a word, when you are writing a piece, dont forget about its readers.Lets-四.组员齐献策I like art bestBoth my teachers and classmates think I am able to sing well because I have a gift for singing. I began to learn my first song Twinkle, twinkle, little star when I was six years old. At that time I found that singing was such an interesting thing, up to now, I have learned over two hundred songs. In my spare time, I often sing songs to others. Everyone is happy to be my listeners, because of my passion and confidence. Even though I cannot be a professional singer, I still get a lot of fun from singing. Because of singing, my life becomes more colourful.五.练修改展示与评价1.The biggest problem in my first draft is-.2. a. I try to add/cut off/change/-because I hope my readers can know/understand/realize-better. b. I make such a change in my piece because I want to express/show/find a way to- c. The best words/sentences/most interesting details in my pieces are-.I wrote them because-. d. I am satisfied with the change most because-. e. Compared with my first draft。