曹军喜读后续写指导课.ppt

Welcome to Eric’s class!A storywhenwherewhowhathowwhyReading for Writingan old mana little boysell magazinesReading for Writinghardly ever came outnot say hello tosimply just glared atTip 1: By describing what a character does in detail instead of telling the readers directly, you can show his personalities or feelings vividly.unfriendlyReading for Writingopened slowly, said impatientlyunwillingknocked on the doortried to sell magazinesstared…without a word uninterestedasked about the dog figurinesReading for Writing“Yes, I have many collections in my house. They are my family here and they are all I have.”Tip 2: By describing what a character says, you can picture his personalities or feelings vividly.lonelymy familyall I haveReading for Writingslowly, impatientlyunwillingknocked on the doortried to sell magazinesstared…without a word uninterestedasked about the dog figurines…my family…all I haveinterestedtried again to sell magazinesclosed the door, No, goodbye impatientReading for WritingWhat would the boy do next?…had an idea…had a little dog figurine…did not mean nearly as much to him…give the dog figurine to the old manTip 3: The development of the story can be inferred from the given information.Reading for WritingInfer the development from the given sentencesPara. 1The little boy headed back down to the old man’s house.Para. 2From that day on something changed inside the old man.Time: in one dayWhat?Place: at the old man’s houseInferring the developmentRaise questions about the developmentTip 4: By raising questions on your own, you can produce more details of the development of the story.Para. 1The little boy headed back down to the old man’s house.Para. 2From that day on something changed inside the old man.Inferring the developmentPara. 1The little boy headed back down to the old man’s house.Q2: How would the old man react to the boy’s visit and offer? Q1: What would the little boy say and do?explained why he came againasked why the boy came againfelt surprised and moved accepted the dog figurine gave the dog figurineInferring the developmentPara. 2From that day on something changed inside the old man.Q1: What changed inside the old man?Q2: What would the boy do for the old man?Q3: How would the old man feel in the end?Inferring the developmenthardly ever came outnot say hello tosimply just glared atonly had dog figurines as his familyUnfriendly:Lonely:came outcommunicate withbecame his friend Not unfriendly:Not lonely:Q1: What change inside the old man?Inferring the developmentQ2: What would the boy do for the old man?Q3: How would the old man feel in the end?often visited …Requirements for Writing第二节：读后续写（满分第二节：读后续写（满分25分）分） 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

成一个完整的故事注意：注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为所续写短文的词数应为150左右；左右；2. 应使用应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Choose the underlined key wordsmagazines, neighbors, the door, the old man, the little boy, quota, dog figurines, collections, lonely soul, real live dogTip 5: Choose the key words covering the most important information, such as the main character(s) and the main object(s).Requirements for WritingTip 1: _______________________________________________________________________ you can show his personalities or feelings vividly.Tip 2: ___________________________________ you can picture his personalities or feelings vividly.Tips for Writing By describing what a character does in detail instead of telling the readers directly, By describing what a character says, Assessment Criteria for Writing Items （条目）（条目）Levels （档次）（档次）Cohesion（与所给短文和段落开头衔接融合程度）（与所给短文和段落开头衔接融合程度）☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆Use of underlined words（下划线词汇使用情况）（下划线词汇使用情况）☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆Rich Content（内容的丰富性）（内容的丰富性）☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆Accuracy of language（语法结构和词汇使用的准确性）（语法结构和词汇使用的准确性）☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆Variety of language（语法结构和词汇使用的丰富性）（语法结构和词汇使用的丰富性）☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆Coherence（上下文以及语句间的连贯性）（上下文以及语句间的连贯性）☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆ ☆☆Content: cohesive (well connected), rich, Language: accurate, rich, coherent, more than 5 underlined key words reasonable, logicalContinuing the story Para. 1The little boy headed back down to the old man’s house.explained why he came againgave the dog figurineasked why the boy came againfelt surprised and moved accepted the dog figurine Para. 2From that day on something changed inside the old man.came out, communicatedbecame friendsfelt no longer lonelyoften visited …Assessing students’ workTip 1: By describing what a character does in detail instead of telling the readers directly, you can show his personalities or feelings vividly.Tip 2: By describing what a character says, you can picture his personalities or feelings vividly.Content: cohesive (well connected), rich, reasonable, logicalLanguage: accurate, rich, coherent, more than 5 underlined key words Para. 1: The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came right to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no magazines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to bring you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the old man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had ever shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versionPara. 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his neighbors. Soon, he and the boy became friends. The boy visited the old man frequently and brought his real live dog to his house once in a while. He even invited the old man to join his family for Christmas dinner. With the boy’s company, the old man was no longer a lonely soul.Appreciating a possible versionPara. 1: The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came right to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no magazines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to bring you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the old man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had ever shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versionPara. 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his neighbors. Soon, he and the boy became friends. The boy visited the old man frequently and brought his real live dog to his house once in a while. He even invited the old man to join his family for Christmas dinner. With the boy’s company, the old man was no longer a lonely soul.Appreciating a possible versionPara. 1: The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came right to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no magazines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to bring you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the old man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had ever shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versionPara. 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his neighbors. Soon, he and the boy became friends. The boy visited the old man frequently and brought his real live dog to his house once in a while. He even invited the old man to join his family for Christmas dinner. With the boy’s company, the old man was no longer a lonely soul.Appreciating a possible versionPara. 1: The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came right to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no magazines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to bring you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the old man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had ever shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versionstared athandedsimplysmiled in tearsLooking attoo toPara. 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his neighbors. Soon, he and the boy became friends. The boy visited the old man frequently and brought his real live dog to his house once in a while. He even invited the old man to join his family for Christmas dinner. With the boy’s company, the old man was no longer a lonely soul.Appreciating a possible versionfrequentlyonce in awhileWith the boy’s companySteps to continue a storyStep 1: Read for the basic information(when, where, who, what, how, why)Step 2: Read for the main plotStep 3: Read for the languageStep 4: Infer the development(the plot, the given two sentences)Step 5: Continue the story(the requirements)Step 6: Polish your writing(refer to the Criteria for Assessment)Assignment• Polish your writing according to the Assessment Criteria for Writing • Share your writing with your classmates• Try to learn from your classmate and meantime give some advice on improving their writing.Thank you。