2017年11月浙江高考英语卷现场高分作文及点评(共20页).doc

精选优质文档-----倾情为你奉上2017年11月浙江高考现场高分作文及点评新鲜出炉！应用文12+/续写20+（附2017年11月浙江新高考英语试卷原题）在这篇文章里面有应用文评分原则，以及有关邀请信的写法今天推出的作文由优秀考生考后根据回忆整理而成感谢我们精英群里的老师提供第一手资料！感谢我的朋友们！感谢资源库的志愿者们提供第一手资料！谢谢分享！先从评分标准开始，然后提供原文，思路解读，作品展示，评析，欢迎吐槽应用文比较简单，不进行思路分析了文章有点长，应用文两篇续写四篇每篇有点评后附一些拓展素材，如细节描写等由于时间仓促，能力有限，不当之处，敬请谅解应用文评分原则:本题总分为15 分，按以下5 个档次给分评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分第一档：（1—3 分）只能写出一两个要点；语言错误很多，只有个别句子正确；第二档：（4—6 分）能写出部分要点；语言错误多，影响意思表达；第三档：（7—9 分）能写明基本要点；语言虽有较多错误，但能基本达意；第四档：（10—12 分）能写明全部或绝大部分要点；语言有少量错误；行文不够连贯，表达基本清楚；第五档：（13—15 分）能写明全部要点；语言基本无误；行文连贯，表达清楚。

3．词数少于60 和多于100 的，从总分中减去2 分4．评分时，应注意的主要内容为：时态、人称、内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性5．拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受6．如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次邀请信四要素1. 开篇点题，发出邀请2. 介绍邀请参加的活动（内容、地点、时间、注意事项）3. 夸赞对方希望得到回复4.再次发出邀请优秀句式】1. I’m writing to tell you that we intend to... and I sincerely invite you to go with us on behalf of our class.2.You may equip yourself with a camera to record the beautiful scenery and an umbrella or a raincoat is also necessary in case you are caught in a rain.3.Your participation can surely add color to our trip and we are all looking forward to your involvement.应用文原题大意第四部分 写作（共两节，满分40分）第一节 应用文写作（满分15分） 假如你是李华，你们学校的外教Mr. Hall寒假不回国。

你打算邀请他去你家里一起过春节 文章内容需包含以下要点：1. 时间2. 一同过节的家人3. 活动注意：1.词数80左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯优秀学生现场作文1Dear Mr. Hall,I hear that you’re not going to go back to your country in the coming winter vocation,so I’m writing to invite you to spend the Spring Festival with my family together. If you considerately accept my invitation, I’ll ask my parents to pick you up next Monday and drive you straight to my house where my brother,sister and grandparents will all be in.Spring Festival plays a significant role in every Chinese’life,so various activities are indispensable in adding flavor to the festival. We’ll have a big feast together,gathering around the table and praying for next year’s good luck.After the meal,a lucky charm and a red pocket which contains lucky money will be given to everyone and some lucky words are said to each other.Everything will overflow with happiness then. I sincerely hope that you can accept my earnest invitation and can reply to me at your earliest convenience. Yours Li Hua 聂同学习作简要点评该生文章开头点名写信目的：邀请外教Mr. Hall来家里过春节。

简明扼要中间段表明：邀请外教过来后，我们这边的安排春节的习俗（家人团聚等）以及热闹景象描述了一番 在语言层面：该生用drive you straight to my house where my brother,sister and grandparents will all be in 用副词straight修饰drive 表示热情，后面用一个定语从句，表示春节家人都在一起团聚的习俗之后该生用了一个句子Spring Festival plays a significant role in every Chinese’ life ，表明春节在中国人的生活中很重要，所以有各种有趣的活动various activities are indispensable in adding flavor to the festival用了高级词汇indispensable 以及adding flavor to然后是支撑句：支撑句1 We’ll have a big feast together,gathering around the table and praying for next year’s good luck.用非谓语动词支撑句2 After the meal,a lucky charm and a red pocket which contains lucky money will be given to everyone and some lucky words are said to each other.用定语从句再一个总结句 Everything will overflow with happiness then.最后，该生在文章结尾提出希望：真诚希望外教接受邀请以及希望得到外教的回复。

该生完全完成了试题规定的任务；文章覆盖了所有内容要点我们可以看出，该生的表达很符合逻辑，表述清晰，语言基本功扎实，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇.能使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇，具备较强的语言运用能力属于第五档次，建议得分12分优秀学生现场作文2Dear Mr. Hall, Hearing that you wont go back this Spring Festival, Im more than honored to invite you to spend it with my family. If it is convenient to you, come to join us on the Spring Festival evening at 6oclock, well offer you some traditional activities. First, well have some Chinese cuisine, like dumplings and noodles. For the next,firework will be played in the starry sky. Then my grandparents will tell some folk tales, dating back to ancient China. Alongside my parents, youll be bound to leave a memorable impression.Here are my profound thanks！Looking forward to your coming! Yours, Lihua 简要点评这篇习作格式正确，条理并覆盖了所有内容要点，语言优美。

作者具备较强的语言运用能力词汇丰富，比如“offer you some traditional activities；in the starry sky；be bound to leave a memorable impression.等尝试使用较复杂的结构，如：Then my grandparents will tell some folk tales, dating back to ancient China.在最后一段profound thanks 建议改为 sincere thanks，更为合理profound ”深远的“ 一般用来修饰影响、后果综上所述，这篇习作的得分可以进入第五档建议得分12分邀请信素材【篇首句】介绍自己，简要说明活动，并邀请对方1. I’m Wang Ming from YuWen School，the president of the Student Union.我是来自育文学校的王明，学生会主席2. An English speaking contest of our school will be held on August 6.我们学校有一场英语演讲比赛将在8月6号举行。

3. There will be a party in my garden on Sunday.周日，在我的花园里会举行一场聚会4. I’d like to invite you to judge it.我想邀请你做它的裁判5. I’m writing to invite you to...我写信是邀请你......6. I wonder if you can come to...我想知道你是否能来......7. We sincerely hope you can attend it.我们真诚希望你能够参加8. It’s 。