读后续写++比赛收获类（内向的我参加英语演讲比赛）讲义 高考英语作文复习专项.docx

读后续写 比赛收获类（内向的我参加英语演讲比赛）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文I had never noticed her. She was not the kind of girl who could draw attention. She was not tall and just plain. In class, she liked sitting at the back, reading or taking notes. It was once I asked her to read aloud the text that I looked at her with new eyes when I heard her standard American pronunciation. Later on, the National College English Speech Contest would be held. I thought it over and filled in her name with a smile. I red-penciled her draft of speech, corrected her pronunciation, and even adjusted her body language.However, I was always kind of worried because she was too introvert (内向的) and too quiet. Could she seize this rare opportunity?On the night of the contest, I told her to take it easy. Blushed (脸红的), she looked at me and said nothing.My heart sank. It seemed that she did tense up. I patted her and let her go to draw lots(抽签).As a result, what she drew was No. 9 while No.8 was recognized English master-hand (高手).Sure enough, the English master-hand was fairly successful in the speech with his humor and highly personal style. The whole audience would make a warm applause almost every 30 seconds until she appeared on the stage, still talking over his speech with excitement.My palms began to sweat. I sat there, with no courage to look at her. It was the first time that she went up the stage, so I couldn't blame her for any slips. But at that moment, I found I was so scared of her failure.The strong spotlight made her so small and so insignificant that nobody seemed to notice she had been on the stage, I said to myself, no hope.But the moment that shocked me occurred. I clearly heard a voice, a very loud voice, "Now, please focus on me." She said this sentence three times in al1. louder and louder.Para1:The whole audience fell silent. _________Para2:After her speech ended for a long while, a thunderous applause sounded in the whole audience._一 文章大意：“我”的一个性格内向的学生，由于标准的美英发音，被“我”推荐参加英语演讲比赛，在她站上演讲台之前， 一位选手凭着精彩的表现获得了观众认可，“我”觉得我的学生没戏了…二 首句分析：从首句2：After her speech ended for a long while, a thunderous applause sounded in the whole audience.可以推断续写第一段应该写“我”的学生演讲成功三 问题聚焦：续写首段只出现了“我”的学生一方，续写的情节比较简单，即演讲成功，如何通过描写细节，合理创设互动性元素，加入作者评议等推进情节的发展，值得大家思考。

四 范文欣赏：The whole audience fell silent. Small and thin as the girl appeared, the determined look on her face instantly caught everyone’s eyes.（神色） She glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began her speech.（动作） Everything went smoothly－her voice was clear and influential and her speech was logical and well-organized.（演讲要素：声音；内容） Words of power and grace flowed freely out of the girl like magic.（作者的评述1） She was usually soft-voiced and rarely drew attention in public before.（作者评述2） It was like something in a dream! （作者评述3）（第二段续写，根据所给句“我”的学生演讲非常成功，如何衔接往下写？既然是比赛，自然会呈现比赛结果。

再接下去出现互动的双方，即“我”和“我”的学生，也可以加入“我”的学生与观众的互动After her speech ended for a long while, a thunderous applause sounded in the whole audience. When the competition was drawing to a close, still immersed in her stunning performance, all of us waited nervously for the winner’s name to be called.（细节：等待比赛结果） Tears of joy blurred my vision the moment the host announced that she won the first prize.（比赛结果+“我”的反应） Holding the trophy tightly, she gave me a brilliant smile.（学生的动作） “You surely made yourself the most shining focus tonight!” I exclaimed, cheerfully pulling her into my arms. （“我”的反应：语言+动作） Yes, sometimes a tremendous energy originates from the silent accumulation.（主题） 五 佳作片段欣赏：The whole audience fell silent. They were amazed by the sudden voice and noticed a small figure standing on the stage. Everyone’s interest was aroused and they wondered what wonderful speech the little girl would make. I could feel my heart beating wildly at that moment. As everyone focused on her, she started her speech. Out of my expectation, she poured out words in a steady flow and behaved bravely and confidently. Everyone present was conquered by her standard pronunciation and perfect performance. 六 巩固补练：（积累相似话题语块，迁移应用） In the first and second grades, I was extremely shy. I had friends, but it just wasn’t in my personality to be very outgoing, even if I knew someone well. I was even quieter with strangers, and so I wasn’t very good at meeting new people. I was afraid that I would do or say something wrong. So in our school’s annual grand play, I usually sat in a secluded (僻静的) corner to watch the performance alone. I hoped to sit in the background and watch the actors sweat in front of all those pairs of eyes. One day in the third grade, my teacher Mrs. Sally called me into her office and said, “Oh, Mary, you’re great at memorizing things, and you have such a sweet personality. Perfect for Jenny!” But I bowed my head and dared not speak. The teacher saw this and then said, “Of course, plenty of girls would love the role, and 1 could find somebody else. But I hope you could try it f。