WritingEnglishComposition.ppt

Writing￿English￿Composition通城县隽水寄宿中学通城县隽水寄宿中学 卢细华卢细华----Saving the Earth writingCompare￿A￿with￿B,￿which￿is￿better?￿Why?Compare￿A￿with￿B,￿which￿is￿better?￿Why?习作演练(15分)p 随随着着经经济济的的快快速速发发展展，，中中国国发发生生了了巨巨大大的的变变化化，，但但我我们们也也遇遇到到许许多多问问题题请请你你根根据据表表格格内内的的要要点点提提示示，，以以Saving Saving the the earthearth为为题题写写一一篇篇短短文文，，列列举举人人类类的的不不明明智智之之举举，，以以及及导导致致的的问问题题，，并并且且针对问题提出解决办法针对问题提出解决办法人类的不明智之举1，乱扔垃圾 2，乱伐树木 3，排放废物★pour , waste导致的问题1，土地沙化 2，河水变脏 3，空气质量变差 4，全球气温升高★ desert , temperature, rise你的建设合理化的建设至少一条p要求：要求：p1，，必必须包包含含所所有有提提示示信信息息，，词数数在在80左左右右，，短短文文的的开开头已已给出，不出，不计入入总词数；数；p2，意思清楚，表达通，意思清楚，表达通顺，行文，行文连贯，，书写写规范；范；p3，，请勿使用真勿使用真实姓名、校名及提示信息以外的地名。

姓名、校名及提示信息以外的地名pSaving the Earth As time goes by, man is making the earth sick._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________认认 真真 审审 题题1,What contents should be written?①现象现象Phenomenon(1.throw rubbish everywhere 2.cut down trees 3.pour waste into … ））②influences ( 4. Change into desert 5. Water and air dirty 6.The temperature is rising…)③opinions(1.We had better …2.We have only one earth.)2,What linking words will be used?what's worse, also, As a result , not only…but also…, so3,How many words should be written?About 80 words.列出提纲，画写作导图列出提纲，画写作导图 (make a writing mind map) 几点建议：几点建议：1.1.注意标点和字母大小写注意标点和字母大小写. .2.2.注意句子的结构正确。

注意句子的结构正确3.3.注意恰当使用关联词注意恰当使用关联词(the linking words)(the linking words)本篇文章应分为几段，每段都写什么？本篇文章应分为几段，每段都写什么？应选用哪种时态？第几人称？应选用哪种时态？第几人称？需要用到哪些句式结构？需要用到哪些句式结构？请构思：请构思：Correct the composition by yourself! 1，，Exchange your articles with another group , then underline the golden sentences and circle the mistakes.2，，Score the composition.评分标准（Writing￿score￿standard）档档次次评分评分范围范围要要 求求五五13-13-1515能写出全部要点，行文连贯，语言基本无误，完全达到写作要求能写出全部要点，行文连贯，语言基本无误，完全达到写作要求四四10-10-1212能写出全部要点，行文基本连贯，语言有少量错误，基本达到写作能写出全部要点，行文基本连贯，语言有少量错误，基本达到写作要求。

要求三三7-97-9能写出大部分要点，语言虽有较多错误，尚能达意能写出大部分要点，语言虽有较多错误，尚能达意二二4-64-6能写出大部分要点，语言错误多，未达到写作要求能写出大部分要点，语言错误多，未达到写作要求一一0-30-3只写出一、二个句子，语言错误多只写出一、二个句子，语言错误多, ,抄袭其他内容，所写内容无法看抄袭其他内容，所写内容无法看清者一律给清者一律给0 0分Correct￿the￿mistakes￿in￿writingp1, “汉语式式”英英语￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿2, 时态的的误用用p3, 用用词不当不当￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿4，修，修饰语错位位p5，，结构不完整构不完整￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿6，，逻辑关系混乱不清关系混乱不清p7，，词性性误用用￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿￿8，指代不清，指代不清p9，，综合性合性语言言错误(大写字母、拼写、大写字母、拼写、p￿￿￿￿￿￿主位一致、主位一致、标点、冠点、冠词、名、名词单复数复数…））One￿possible￿versionpSaving the Earthp As time goes by, man is making the earth sick. People throw rubbish everywhere. Also they cut down many trees, which does great harm to our environment. What’s worse they pour waste into the rivers. As a result, rich land is becoming desert. The water and air are getting dirtier and dirtier. Even worse, the temperature is rising. So we must do everything we can to save our earth. It’s our duty to protect the environment. Stop pouring waste water and producing terrible gas. We had better walk, ride a bike or take a subway to work instead of taking a bus or a taxi. We have only one earth. Saving the earth is to save us human beings. p1.Before writing, read the topic requirement carefully, then make a writing outline/map.p2.While writing, use English expressions as often as possible.p3.After writing, correct your writing again and again, make it correct 、、fluent and neat.Some￿tips￿for￿you!HomeworkA：：继续改写本改写本节课作文，使它更加完美。

作文，使它更加完美B：：“保保护环境境，，人人人人有有责”，，请以以“How to be a greener person”为题写写一一篇篇80字字左左右右的的短短文文从从身身边小小事事做做起起，，谈谈如如何何做做一一个个环保者T谢谢观看HANK YOU!。