雅思教父刘洪波服装类雅思作文高分范文及点评.doc

雅思教父刘洪波：服装类雅思作文高分范文及点评雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品《最简化雅思写作》8月光芒上市从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想完全应对官方四大评分标准最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐1.流行时尚In modern society, fashion is becoming more highly valued in people's choice of clothes. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?It seems that in recent years more and more people, especially in urban areas, are dressing more stylishly. Nowadays it is not uncommon to see people walking around in brand name clothes and sunglasses like celebrities. But why is this happening and is it a positive development? Personally I feel that whether it’s good or bad depends on the individual’s attitude.The cause of this fashion obsession surely is connected to movies and pop culture. In today’s society, we are constantly seeing images of attractive movies stars and MTV videos with pop icons wearing the most recent styles. To some extent, and perhaps even subconsciously, this affects our own behaviour as we imitate what we see.One on level, being fashionable is quite healthy. It is natural for us to want to look good, because if we look good we feel good about ourselves. Especially in today’s world of work and relationships, it’s important to have good self-esteem and be confident. Looking good can help us achieve that.But from another angle, being too fashion-conscious has its problems. Sometimes people end up obsessing about buying the most expensive things and look down upon others who can’t afford them. Such people become superficial and often don’t pay enough attention to the important things in life, like friendship and being a good person.So in the end, each person has to find the right balance regarding how fashionable to be. There is nothing wrong with looking good and feeling good; in fact it’s human. But we must also be sure not to dwell on it so much.(265 words)Harvey点评：写作线索：首段，引出现象并表态；第二段，问答第一个问题why；第三段，positive；第四段；negative。

末段总结本文清新自然，没有大道理，很多小常识比如第三段第二句：It is natural for us to want to look good, because if we look good we feel good about ourselves. 好作文不是高难词汇的堆砌最简单的词汇也可以直指人心，赢得读者共鸣先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用词汇stylishly adv.时髦地celebrity n.名人，名流obsession n.迷住，迷恋pop adj.流行的，通俗的icon n. 偶像，图标subconsciously adv.下意识地imitate v.模仿fashionable adj.流行的，时髦的self-esteem n.自尊superficial adj.肤浅的短语depend on取决于be connected to 和…有联系to some extent 某种程度上from another angle从另一方面看look down upon 瞧不起pay attention to 关注dwell on 仔细研究三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子l Nowadays it is not uncommon to see people walking around in brand name clothes and sunglasses like celebrities.l Personally I feel that whether it’s good or bad depends on the individual’s attitude.l Especially in today’s world of work and relationships, it’s important to have good self-esteem and be confident.。