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雅思官方高分范文.pdf

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    • 真题When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 官方高分作文Overall, I disagree with the opinion expressed. I would like to begin by pointing out that “traditional skills and ways of life“ are not automatically of one country, but of a culture or community. In many ways, the history of civilization is the history of technology: from the discovery of fire to the invention of the wheel to the development of the Internet, we have been moving on from previous ways of doing things. Some technologies, such as weapons of mass destruction, are of negative impact. Others, such as medical advances, positively help people to live better or longer, and so very much help traditional ways of life. Surely, few people would seek to preserve such traditions as living in caves! Interestingly, technology can positively contribute to the keeping alive of traditional skills and ways of life. For example, the populations of some islands are too small to have normal schools. Rather than breaking up families by sending children to the mainland, education authorities have been able to use the Internet to deliver schooling online. In addition, the Internet, and modern refrigeration techniques, are being used to keep alive the traditional skills of producing salmons; it can now be ordered from and delivered to, anywhere in the world. In conclusion, without suggesting that all technology is necessarily good, I think it is by no means “pointless“, in any way, to try to keep traditions alive with technology. We should not ignore technology, because it can be our friend and support our way of life. 逐句解析Overall, I disagree with the opinion expressed.(第一句话当中,作者直接说出了自己的观点, 这有点区别于我们中国学生通常所使用的背景开头方式,但是它在这个开头中也使用了学生不大使用的结构,一个是overall,另外一个是过去分词做后置定语,既 expressed ) I would like to begin by pointing out that “traditional skills and ways of life“ are not automatically of one country, but of a culture or community.( 作者在这个地方所提出的观点非常的犀利,同时使用的结构也很不错,我们现在来看一下, I would like to do 我想做 .,这个结构是中国学生都非常熟悉的,但是他随后使用的by doing 就比较的标新立异,随后他又使用了一个宾语从句,这样结构就丰满起来了。

      同时, 作者对于标点符号的使用也是非常具有特色的,这里面的符号确实起到了加强的作用,同学们以后要注意对于标点符号的使用另外,这里面的连词but 虽然不是很难,但是却是用的非常恰倒好处希望大家可以借鉴这样的一种写法再者,这里面,考官没有使belong to 这样的结构来表示属于,而是很简洁的使用了be of ,这说明,简洁的表达受到了考官的关注更为重要的是作者给出了一个别人都不大容易想到的观点,传统的技能以及生活方式并不是自然的属于某一个国家的,而是属于某一种文化和区域) In many ways, the history of civilization is the history of technology: from the discovery of fire to the invention of the wheel to the development of the Internet, we have been moving on from previous ways of doing things.(这个句子是由40 个单词所组成的,其中含有的结构都是中国学生耳熟能详的,但是大家需要注意如下的3 个特点: 1,考官在这里所使用的开头句就非常具有震撼力,在很多方面来说,文明史就是科技史,大家想想,你们在写作文的时候有没有这样的一种思维观? 2,考官再次显示了标点符号的重要性,大家在举例的时候是不是比较喜欢使用for instance和 for example?而考官在这里面就只使用了一个简单的“:“,另人很绝望啊!佩服的绝望,他的使用不仅最简单,而且最准确。

      随后它所举的例子是近期高分作文的时候经常发现的一种结构,既排比,这种结构现在在8 分以及满分作文中屡见不鲜, 成方兴未艾之势,我想原因就在于它的一种力量性大家应该好好的把握这种结构 3,思想的连续性也在这句话中得到了充分的体现作者开头说的是文明史就是科技史记,随后在举出了例证之后,自然引导出了这样的一个观点,我们的进步是以坚持传统方式为起点的思想并证明着大家应该记得这样的思路Some technologies, such as weapons of mass destruction, are of negative impact. Others, such as medical advances, positively help people to live better or longer, and so very much help traditional ways of life.(在这句话当中,作者非常巧妙的使用了对比法,一开始说,很多科技,比如大规模杀伤性武器,是存在负面作用的,而其它的科技,例如医学进步,则积极的促进了人民生活水平的提高,延长了人的寿命,从而极大的弥补了传统生活方式的缺陷!大家看到了没有,作者在对比的同时还在举例子,不厌其烦的举例子。

      例子是多么的重要啊! Surely, few people would seek to preserve such traditions as living in caves!(作者在丝丝入扣的分析,旁征博引之后,忽然话锋一转,举起了批判的板斧,砍将下去一语双关的说道,当人们还生活在洞穴当中的时候,很少有人会去保护这种传统的!这个可以理解为,当技术还没有发展到一定程度的时候,文化还很落后的时候, 人们是不可能想到保护文化的同时人们住在洞穴中这句话还可以理解为坐井观天,说狭隘的人怎么会想到保护文化,非常之犀利)Interestingly, technology can positively contribute to the keeping alive of traditional skills and ways of life.(作者在段首又开始发彪了,又提出了一个具有建设性的观点, 说有意思的是, 科技可以在保持传统技能与生活方式的生命力方面做出积极的贡献) For example, the populations of some islands are too small to have normal schools. (他又开始举例子了,一个离开例子就不能活的刀笔手。

      注:刀笔手指写文章很厉害的人, 他可以用笔做刀, 同时可以用刀把文章裁减成他想象的任何样子,而且不留痕迹,并且可以杀人于无形高手!这个例子初看比较奇怪,说,很多岛屿中的人口太少,建立正规的学校是不可能的这个和科技有什么关系啊!?但你看他后面说的话)Rather than breaking up families by sending children to the mainland, education authorities have been able to use the Internet to deliver schooling online.(他在解剖这个例子,教育专家已经能够通过因特网将课程传到网上,而不需要使孩子离开家庭来到大陆这个角度是不是很刁钻?!) In addition, the Internet, and modern refrigeration techniques, are being used to keep alive the traditional skills of producing salmons; it can now be ordered from and delivered to, anywhere in the world.(作者在这里面使用了一个比较诡异的写作方法,意识流!!!居然是意识流!!!当初JAMES JOYCE (詹姆斯乔伊斯)就是靠这个写作技法独步文坛。

      创作出了另世人惊奇的. 本文中,考官通过岛屿孩子的例子说明了因特网的好处,同时又用因特网举出了另外的一个例子明白这个写作思路吗! A-B B-C C-D D-E ,如果没有篇幅的限制,他可以任意的导出而且他这次的例子又是那么奇怪, 居然说的是因特网以及现代的冷冻技术的应用使得传统的马哈鱼加工工艺保留了下来现在,马哈鱼可以在全球达成定购与收购)In conclusion, without suggesting that all technology is necessarily good, I think it is by no means “pointless“, in any way, to try to keep traditions alive with technology. We should not ignore technology, because it c。

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