备战新高考高中英语写作读后续写 教案三.docx

读后续写（Continuation writing）读后续写阅读下面的短文，根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事Exercise 3My mother was a determined supporter of physical punishment, but for all her talking she has never done that on my sisters, and me only once. Instead she found ways of punishment that left a more lasting memory. One of the most memorable of these occasions occurred when I was four.One day at daycare I watched an extremely tired mother attempt to pick up her daughter. The little girl asked, “Momma, are we going to McDonald's for dinner?" The mother replied, “Honey, not tonight. Momma has to run a few business and then we have to go home and cook dinner for Daddy." “But I want to go,” the little girl repeated without paying attention to what her mother had said. "Susie, I said not tonight. Maybe, if you are a good girl we can go tomorrow. After hearing this, Susie immediately dropped to the floor, kicking and screaming, “I want to go to McDonald's!"No amount of pleading or scolding that her mother tried stopped Susie’s behavior. Finally her mother gave in, "Okay, Susie, let's go to McDonald's." Susie stopped yelling and smiled. She grabbed her mother’s hand and they left. To say I was amazed would be inaccurate. I was delighted that anything I wanted could be got in this way. It was great, wasn't it?That day my mother picked me up early from daycare because we were going to pay on some Christmas goods that we booked in advance. I was excited by the lights and decorations, and as we walked through the toy section on the way to the Layaway Department, I saw a toy I had to have. It was a white and red telephone whose bells rang as it was pulled along on a string.Looking lovingly up at my mother, I asked, "Mama? can I have that telephone?”She replied, “Becky, not now.”注意：1． 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； ”2． 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3． 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4． 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。

Paragraph 1:“ But Mama , I want that telephone right now,” I insisted . Paragraph 2:Shocked , I stood up. The next thirty minutes in the Department was pure misery for me. 一、 试题详解1. 核心内容文本讲述了一对母女发生在商场的故事文章先用较少的笔触向我们介绍了一位信奉“体罚”，但从未打过孩子的母亲而后，作者讲述了自己意图效仿其他孩子，试图通过发脾气来向母亲索求玩具而失败的故事2 .写作思路(1) 明确故事人物关系(characters)： 故事中主要人物为作者Becky、Becky的母亲、Susie、其他顾客2) 理清故事主要事件(events)：Becky的母亲信奉“体罚”，但从未打过孩子，而用其他方法使他们从中吸取经验教训；Susie通过发脾气达到了去麦当劳的目的;Becky央求母亲买玩具，母亲拒绝了Becky的请求。

3) 根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)：故事总体的发展可能是 Becky试图效仿Susie,意图通过发脾气来达到自己的目的，却被母亲用巧妙的方法化解，并从中获得经验教训续写第一段:Becky坚持要买礼物可能是效仿前文Susie的举动,Becky试图通过发脾气来达到目的，但是Becky的母亲不为所动根据第一段的文章铺垫，母亲应该用了一种较为巧妙的方式教训了 Becky续写第二段:Becky看到母亲举手大为震惊，立刻站了起来而接下来在商场中的30分钟成了最令她痛苦的30分钟可能是旁人的眼光使她感到尴尬可以写写Becky那时的心理活动，也可以写写Becky在这件事上所获得的经验教训4) 结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)：第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：How could Becky achieve her goal? What did she do? Did she achieve her goal? How did her mother respond to her behavior? What made Becky shocked? 第二段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：Why was the thirty minutes pure misery for Becky? How did she feel then? What could she learn from this experience?二、 参考范文“But Mama , I want that telephone right now,”I insisted. “Becky, not now, but if you are a good girl maybe Santa will bring it to you." my mother restrained her temper. By now we were in the Layaway Department, and therefore I figured it was now or never. I lay down on the ground and began kicking and screaming, “I want that telephone.”My mother calmly said, “Becky, you'd better get up by the count of three or else... One... Two... Three.” Nothing. So then, beyond my expectation, she lay down beside me on the floor, and began kicking and screaming, “I want a new car! I want a new house! I want..."Shocked , I stood up. The next thirty minutes in the Department was pure misery for me. Weary Christmas shoppers looked at me and various parents shook their heads at me. Others began to clap, saying with a smile, “I bet you’ll never try that again. " And I didn't, because it left a lasting memory more effective than any physical punishment.三、 范文解析范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。

前文铺垫了母亲有巧妙的方法教育孩子以及Becky 看到Susie通过发脾气达到目的两项内容，因此第一段写了 Becky也企图通过同样的方式来实现买玩具的愿望，而母亲通过自己的方式教育了孩子第二段，由于母亲出乎意料的处理手段，从而可能引来商场里人群的围观，这使得Becky感到既震惊，又羞愧，处于一个尴尬的境地，符合故事发展的逻辑 最后一句话与文章开头呼应，突出了故事的主题四、 提炼归纳1. 合理拓展情节在该练习中，我们通过8个问题来拓展整理自己的写作思路，这8个问题以Becky为表达的主体， 问题之间有一定的逻辑联系，符合故事发展的合理结局2. 有效运用连接手段 '范文中我们用了"and therefore, so then, because”来表示因果关系及事件的发展；用shocked—词，生动地表现出Becky感受到的意外这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。