作文2-Changesinme.doc

`composition-changes in me【题目】写一篇以前你是什么样子的，现在的你是什么样子的短文可以用以下提示词，不少于5句话quiet, active, short, tall, thin, strong, go cycling, ice-skate,...)一、审题：以前——一般过去时（过去式）现在——一般现在时（原形）以前： before, 3 years ago, then, at that time现在： now二、选择标题Changes in meThen and NowBefore and Now列表过去和现在对比，一一对应可以从外貌、性格、能力、爱好等方面作对比列3点最佳三、写作1、分3段总——分——总如果通篇只有一段，看得阅卷老师眼睛累，增加阅卷负担，会影响作文分数哦～每段前面空2个字母2、注重开头开头用适当的、高级的句子放在开头，起到一鸣惊人的效果给阅卷老师一个震撼：嗯，这个人英语很不错嘛～3、注重结尾开头和结尾，是阅卷老师非常注重的部分。

有个漂亮的开头，再加上一个漂亮的结尾，再次给予阅卷老师一个震撼：这孩子，英语果然很不错呢！给高分！一定给高分！4、注意字迹工整、卷面整洁1）字不能太小，不然增加阅卷老师的阅卷难度你给他们找麻烦，他们也会给你找麻烦哦——扣分！字也不能太大不然就不美观，整体看起来会很凌乱2）字迹一定要工整，不能涂涂改改、影响整体效果改作文的阅卷老师改一篇英语作文不会十秒看标题、开头、结尾，中间扫一眼，打分如果没发现错误，加上你的字迹工整、卷面整洁，恭喜你，你至少能拿8分哦～（3）单词中间不能涂改单词也不能转行4）如果你涂涂改改——oh no，这个人写作文吞吞吐吐，自己都没想好自己说什么，英语肯定不会很好扣分！扣分！关于字迹工整有句话叫做：“字如其人阅卷老师大都是这样想的你连英语字母都写不好，成绩肯定不会好到哪里去扣分扣分！如果你字迹工整、卷面整洁，就算发现了一些错误，阅卷老师也可能会心情好得放过你：一定是考试太紧了，没关系没关系，字这么好看，少扣点分！如果真实水平是6分的作文，字不好看，可能只得到3分；如果字好看，说不定能得8分呢！如果真是水平是8分的作文，字好看，10分送给你送给你；如果字不好看，哎呀，给个6分就算了。

三、易错句型1. Now, I very strong.2. Well, I was short.3. Now, I very like winter.4. Now, I like ice-skate.5. Im taller then before.6. Now, I am tall and strong than before.7. Before, I was quiet. Now, I active in the class.8. Now, I am every active in class.9. Before, I was quiet. Now, I am active in the class. Im taller than before. I always talk with joy.10. Before, i didnt like winter. Because, it was too cold.11. Hello, Im Amy. I 13 years old.12. 因果倒置Before, I didnt like winter. So, I couldnt go cycling. Now, I love winter, so I can go ice-skating.13. didnt 和couldnt 用法混乱二者都表示否定。

couldnt 表示不能，没有能力didnt表示不，有能力但是不愿意做 Before, I was short. I didnt go cycling. Before, I couldnt like winter.14. 逻辑混乱Before, I could play badminton. Now, I cant play badminton.Before, I was active. Now, Im quiet. I always talk with joy.15. be 动词乱用 Hello, Im Amy. I 13 years old. Before, I short. Now, I tall. Before, I was short. Now, I was tall. Before, Im couldnt go cycling.Now, Im can ride a bike.be动词用法：(1)是(2)be＋形容词(…的)(3)be＋动ing(4)be going to+动原 (表将来)不能加be动词的情况1)动词原形 lm like to go ice-skating.(2)动词过去式。

Im rode a horse last weekend.四、开头1. Hi, everyone. Im Amy. Im 12 years old.Im different now.2.Changes are around me.3.Changes are with me.4. Everything is changing. Me too!五、中间一）外貌对比1.（身高）Before, I was short. Now, Im taller than before.2.（体重）Before, I was thin. Now, Im stronger than before.3.（身高＋体重）Before, I was short and thin. Now, Im taller and stronger than before.4.（头发） Before, I had short hair. Now, I have long hair.5.（眼镜） Before, I didnt wear glasses. but now, I wear glasses.二、性格对比 quiet-active, shy-funny, strict-friendly/funny, （not）hard-working at school, (not) helpful at home/school(1) Before, I was quiet. Now, Im very active in class. Ialways talk with joy.(2) Once I wasntan active girl. I didnt talk a lot. Now, I talk more than before. I always talk with joy. 过去、现在写一句也可以。

写你不会写错的三、能力对比(couldnt/ can+动原)1. Before, I couldnt go cycling. Now, I can ride a bike.I ride a bike every day. (I like it very much.)(Im good at riding a bike.) go cycling= ride a bikeice-skate = go ice-skating(球类)play badminton (乐器类)play the pianodo sports= play sportsclean my room= do the cleaningwash my clothescook do kung fu make a snowmanswim =go swimming四、爱好对比didnt like/ like+动ing +to +动原liked/ dont like+动ing +to +动原1. Before, I didnt like winter. I thought it was too cold, and I couldnt go cycling.Now I like to ice-skate, so I like winter.(spring, summer, autumn, winter)2. (music, sports, English, maths)Before, I didnt like music. Because it was too hard(困难). Now, I can play the piano. So I like music very much.五、tips1、可以把外貌、性格、能力、爱好相结合，写作更出彩。

2、高级词汇、高级句子可以为你的作文增加光彩3、但是，如果你不确定写地对不对，还是改用一般的词汇、一般的句子吧因为错词、错句会扣分，而且很严重4、过去和现在对比，以三个为宜如果句子足够多，两个也可以5、写作一般不少于5句话不多于10句话6、不要通篇都是Before,...Now,... Before,...Now,... Before,...Now,... 写作并不是造句子7、表示过去，可以用before, then, at that time, 3 years ago时间可以放句首，也可以放句末放句首，需要加逗号，放句末则不需要六、文(一)Changes in meHello, everyone. Im Amy. Im different now.3 years ago, I was short and thin. I couldnt ride a bike. Now, Im taller and stronger than before. So I can cycling. I like it very much.What a big change!Then and NowEverything is changing. Me too!Before, I had short hair. But now, I have long hair. Once I wasnt an active girl. I didnt talk a lot. Now, I talk more than before. I always talk with joy.Changes are with me.Before and NowHi, myname is Mike. Changes are with me.3 years ago, I didnt wear glasses. I was quiet in class. At that time, I didnt like music. I thought it was too hard(难).But now, I 。