高考英语读后续写(动作描写).docx

读后续写动作描写前后呼应读后续写的能力要求语法高级紧扣主题读后续写细节丰富抒发情感有画面感读后续写评分标准高考试卷中读后续写题总分为25分，按5个档次给分 第四档（21-25分）与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理；内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语；所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑 第三档（16-20分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接；写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语；应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达；应用简单的语句连接成分，使全文内容连贯 第二档（11-15分）与所给内容有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接；写出了一些有关内容，词汇项目有限，有些语法和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达；较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺乏连贯性 第一档（1-10分）与所提供短文和开头语衔接较差；产出内容较少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语；语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达；缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。

备注：以下情况酌情扣分：1） 关键词未下划线标注（在基础分上扣2分）；2） 雷同卷（和相同句子达到50%以上，判为0分）；===========================我是学习的分割线==============================一、动作描写一篇好的记叙文续写，一定离不开动作描写，想要把动作描写写的生动有画面感，其实为2种思路1） 构造动作链写记叙文就像是拍电影，所有场景都像画面一样，一帧一帧地呈现出来如：“上车”这一动作很多同学不知道该如何刻画细节，只能把动作写的非常单一，比如就是：get into the car 或者是 get on the car. 但是实际上，我们可以把这个动作按时间轴的顺序设计出，“拦车→上车→告诉司机目的地”三个步骤来写1. She stopped a taxi, got into it and told the driver her destination.这三个动词可以用一个连词and进行连接此为动作链句型运用1： 动作A， 动作B and 动作C三个谓语动词只需一个连词and构成如：Trevor Noah的自传“Born A Crime”中说到了童年趣事，在他年幼的时候，南非地区很多家庭大都都没有厕所，都是户外厕所。

.........原文：Finally, after what felt like forever, I finished. I stood up, took the newspaper—which is not the quietest thing—and I slowwwwwwwwly folded it over.举例：1. 关键情节设计：主人公用肉引走狼 动作关键词：扔肉那么动作链设计为：拿出肉→瞄准狼→扔出去He pull out the meat, aimed at the wolf and threw it straight the fierce animal.当堂练习：1. 情节前提：看到失散的儿子，一把抱住 以“抱住”为关键词写出动作链→_____________→___________________ 参考答案： 冲上前→ 蹲下来→一把抱住句子： She dashed forward, knelt down and gather her son into her arm.2. 情节前提： 她获奖，要发言 以“发言”为关键词写出动作链→_____________→___________________ 参加答案：看了眼奖杯→深吸一口气→说到....句子：She glanced at the trophy, took a deep breath and said,”.......”3. “打狗”_________________→_____________→___________________ 参考答案：到处找棍子→找到棍子→狠狠打狗He looked around, found a stick and beat the dog badly.4. “抢劫”_________________→_____________→___________________ 参考答案： 突然出现→刀子抵住脖子→说到：把钱交出来The robber appeared suddenly, press a knife against my neck and muttered threats,”Hand over all the money.”5. “做饭”_________________→_____________→___________________ 参考答案：打开冰箱→拿出食物→做饭She opened the fridge, took out the food she needed and started to cook.真题演练：Paragraph 1：Robert was fast sinking.___________________________________________________Paragraph 2：Thus，Roberts life was saved．___________________________________________________[情节设计]：1.Robert要淹死的时候，Henry 恰好经过。

Henry救了Robert一命2.Robert和他的新朋友都为之前羞辱Henry的事情感到羞愧在这个事情后懂得了勇气的意义句子翻译：听到尖叫声，亨利跑到河边，脱掉衣服，毫不犹豫地跳入水中 范文：Robert was fast sinking.It seemed as if Robert would be drowned. Just at the moment, Henry happened to be passing by. Hearing thescreams, Henry ran to the riverside, threw off his clothes and jumped into the water without hesitation. He reached Robert just as he was sinking the last time. By great effort, and with much danger to himself, he brought Robert to the shore.Thus, Robert’s life was saved.Robert and his newfriendswere ashamed at having called Henry a coward. They realized that Henry had truecourage. They said sorry to Henry for their rudebehaviorand asked for his forgiveness. Henry forgave them happily. He and Robert were friends again and they went home togetheras usual. From this, Robert learned what true courage was: never be afraid to do good, but always fear to do evil.。