中考英语高分作文攻略写事ppt课件.pptx

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,2020/10/24,,‹#›,中考英语高分作文攻略,--,写事,云南师大附中呈贡校区,中考英语高分作文攻略云南师大附中呈贡校区,1,英语,作文,怎么写？,不会啊！,记的单词都忘了！！！,奥利给！胡诌吧！,,我是有原则的！！！,英语怎么写？不会啊！记的单词都忘了！！！奥利给！胡诌吧！我是,2,,新冠疫情下，老师扮演主播角色,,--,表象化、片面化,,,,,此视频反映了什么现象,？,立意,标新,（社会层面）,,--,对复合型人才的需求,（个人影响）,广度,,深度,此视频反映了什么现象？立意标新（社会层面）广度,3,怎样写好英语中考作文,--,叙事,一、分析去年,中考,英语作文,二、总结英语作文写作思路及流程,三、评讲作文,“Everyone needs help”,四、作文拓展延申及赏析,怎样写好英语中考作文--叙事一、分析去年中考英语作文,4,一、,分析去年中考作文,,,分析云南近6年中考真题的书面表达可知，针对“经历与感受”这一话题共涉及过6次， 2017省卷“A Special Day”、 2019昆明“On my parent,’,s birthday”、 2018昆明“A small thing”、 2017昆明A“One day in my childhood”、 2015昆明A“The good old days”、 2014昆明A“A happy time”；全国近年中考真题也针对自己或者他人的经历和感受进行考查。

命题探索,一、分析去年中考作文 分析云南近6年中考真题,5,中考英语高分作文攻略写事ppt课件,6,(2019昆明),On my parent,’,s birthday,,某英文网站正在面向全国中学生开展以“感恩父母”为主题的征文活动，请你用英文以,“On my parent,’,s birthday”,为题目写一篇记叙文投稿，内容为某次你为妈妈或爸爸庆祝生日的经历要求：1. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；,,2. 文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计3. 书面表达必须写在答题卡上，如在本卷上作答，一律不得分2019昆明)On my parent’s birthda,7,范文,点评,On my parent’s birthday,,①August 8th was my mother’s birthday. My father and I wanted to give her surprising birthday presents.,①文章采用“总—分—总”的结构展开叙述范文点评On my parent’s birthday ①文,8,范文,点评,②In the morning，my father and I,went shopping,and bought a very nice cake. Then we went to the market and bought some food. When we got home， my father cooked some nice food in the kitchen. I went to my room to make,a birthday card,. I wanted to tell my mother that I loved her very much. Then I wrote in the card， “I love you， my dear mother！” I put it on her pillow， then we cleaned the room. We felt very tired，but we were very happy. When my mother got home，we said， “Happy Birthday！” My mother smiled. We had supper together. My mother said， “Thank you，my daughter！”,③How happy we were！,②灵活运用多种句型：时间状语从句和宾语从句等，讲述事情的经过。

③结尾用感叹句表达一家人的幸福范文点评 ②In the morning，m,9,二、英语作文写作思路及流程（五个步骤）,1.,审题,（文体、时态、人称、题目内容）,文体：,记叙文,、说明文、议论文和应用文时态：,一般现在时、一般过去时、一般将来时,、,现在进行时、过去进行时、现在完成时、,人称：第一、第二、第三人称,题目内容：写人、叙事,,2.,标新立意,写作的方向、意图和动机广度和深度）,二、英语作文写作思路及流程（五个步骤）1.审题（文体、时态、,10,3.,搭脚手架,,,①,框架（总,-,分,-,总）,,,②,提纲挈领,--,每段主旨,首段 点题,中间 描述事情经过（人物、事件、影响）,结尾 呼题、升华情感,,,3.搭脚手架,11,4.,细节处理、润色,,①准确,地遣词造句,--,好词好句（语言能力）,词法 （词性、词义）,,句法 句子用法分类,句子结构分类,句子成分,(,主谓宾 定状补）,,,,4. 细节处理、润色,12,中考英语高分作文攻略写事ppt课件,13,定语从句,定语从句,14,4.,细节处理、润色,②,思维品质（中英文化差异）,1.,中英表达差异,--,中文含蓄，英文直白,You are so handsome.,你好帅！,陌上人如玉，公子世无双。

You are so beautiful.,你好漂亮！,回眸一笑百媚生，六宫粉黛无颜色4.细节处理、润色1.中英表达差异 -- 中文含蓄，英文,15,2.,状语的习惯用法有些不同,,在北京,大家都喜欢吃烤鸭地点状语）,,Everyone likes roast duck,in Beijing,.,,,,为了取得好成绩,，她每天都熬夜目的状语）,,She stays up late everyday,to get a better grade,.,,In Beijing,,,everyone likes roast duck.,To get a better grade,,,she stays up late everyday.,2.状语的习惯用法有些不同In Beijing, every,16,3.,定语的位置有差异,,中文,（形容词、数量词、名词、代词充当）,,,平静,的湖面,,一个,故事,今天,的报纸,我,的衣服,,,英文,（形容词、名词、代词、数词、,介词短语、动词不定式、分词、定语从句,）,,,calm,lake,a,story,today's,newspaper,,my,clothes,,前置定语 后置定语,3.定语的位置有差异 中文 （形容词、数量词、名词、代词充当,17,英语,后置定语,的用法,：,1.,复合不定代词要用后置定语修饰,,something,interesting,（,interesting,something,）,,2.,动词不定式作后置定语,Do you have anything,to say,?,3.,分词作后置定语,现在分词表主动；过去分词表被动,The man,,lying,on the ground is my father.,（主动）,The pen,,bought,,by her is made in china.,（被动）,,英语后置定语的用法：2. 动词不定式作后置定语3. 分词作后,18,4.,介词短语作后置定语,The boy,in blue,is Tom.,The people,around the world,are fighting with disease.,5.,定语从句作后置定语,The boy,who is strong,is Tom.,Is he the man,who wants to see you,?,4. 介词短语作后置定语5.定语从句作后置定语,19,4.,动词用法的差异,中文：我要,去,爬,山。

英文：,I always,climb,mountains.,I,am climbing,the mountain now.,I,climbed,the mountain yesterday.,I,was climbming,the mountain at eight yesterday morning.,I,will climb,the mountain next Friday.,,,中文可以有不用动词的情况，但英文不能省略动词I tired.,（错,),I am tired.,4.动词用法的差异中文可以有不用动词的情况，但英文不能省略动,20,5.,一词多性多形的正确使用,happy,（,adj.),开心的，高兴的,happiness,（,n.),开心，幸福,happily,（,adv.),开心地,happier,（,adj.),更开心的,happiest,（,adj.),最开心的,more happily (adv.),更开心地,most happily (adv.),最开心地,eg. I am so,happy,today.,She sings a song,happily,.,I think Gina is,the happiest,person in her family.,5.一词多性多形的正确使用happy,21,4,.,③,巧用过渡词,,起：开始,承：承接，并列,转：转折,合：整合，总结,过渡词分类：,文章结构 （,4,类）,句子间的逻辑关系（,10,类）,4.③ 巧用过渡词起：开始过渡词分类：,22,表示顺序： first(ly); second(ly); to begin with; to start with; at first; at last;,in the end; next; then; after that; finally,表示对比： while; on the one hand … on the other hand…,表示转折： but; however; on the other hand; though; although; after all; unluckily;,unfortunately,表示让步： though; although; even if/though,表示举例： for example; for instance; such as; like,表示顺序： first(ly); second(ly); t,23,表示并列: either…or; neither…nor; both…and; not only…but also;,as well as,表示递进： besides; what,’,s more; what,’,s worse; in addition,表示原因： because; because of; for; since; thanks to; for the reason that; as,表示结果： so; therefore; as a result; so…that,表示目的： so that; in order that/to; so as to,表示并列: either…or; neither…nor;,24,5.,评审,,书面表达评分标准,一档,（12-15分）：内容切题、层次清楚、语言流畅、基本无语言表 达错误。

二档,(8-11分)：内容切题、层次比较清楚、语言比较流畅、语言表达错误较少三档,（5-7分）：内容基本切题、层次不够分明、语言表达错误较多四档,（1-4分）：有一定内容、但语言表达错误很多注意：书面表达语法错误全卷扣分不得超过2分；单词拼写错误扣,,分不得超过2分；抄袭卷中阅读材料的，抄袭部分不给分5.评审书面表达评分标准,25,中考英语高分作文攻略写事ppt课件,26,中考英语高分作文攻略写事ppt课件,27,中考英语高分作文攻略写事ppt课件,28,中考英语高分作文攻略写事ppt课件,29,,在生活中你帮助过别人吗？或者得到过别人的帮助吗？请以,“Everyone needs help”,为题，写一个你自己的故事要求：,1.,注意紧扣主题，语言流畅，此数不少于,80,个；,2.,不得使用真实姓名和校名，如需使用名字，请用,Mike, Gina,等英文名，校名统一用,Guangming Middle School;,,三、评讲作文,“Everyone needs help”,在生活中你帮助过别人吗？或者得到过别人的帮助吗？请以,30,,（,At the beginning of 2020, I first realized that people’s lives are in great danger and,,weak,. Lots of danger will,leave,people’s,lives,.,,S,uch as earthquake ,,bore,, rainstorm and so on.,So,to live healthy and better, everyone needs help.,）,,By watching news, we could know that people,all of the world,are fighting with NCP ----a pneumonia.​Wu Han is the centrality of this epidemic situation. We must thank the nurses and doctors who are fighting with NCP.​They help the patients get out of illness,,,but didn’t,think,about,themselves,. How great the nurses and doctors are! And they also received lots of help,. S,uch as the medicine,and mask,,from,every,countries, the doctor from every provinces, the,medical,,material from people. Because of this help,.,Wu Han became better just,within,,one month,,.,,Everything is,j,ust like that saying “ Wherever needs help , the others sides will give.” I,think,we will pass this time soon.,,,In our daily lives , everyone needs help , because of this help,，,we can pass these unexpe,c,ted accidents in the world,,,although we are small and weak.,At the beginning of 2020, I first realize that people are very weak in the face of disaster, so I think everyone can't live better in the world without others' help.,,点题要简明扼要，直击话题,but didn't care about themselves.,different,believe,(,重新立意）,Helping others is helping ourselves. Although all Chinese people are fighting with NCP now, I believe we can overcome all difficulties if we unite together to help each other.,（At the beginning of 2020,,31,Flowers grow with sunshine’s help, and animals need the shelter of trees to survive, so do humans.,,I still remember the day that Mike helped to cheer me up.,The,senior,high school entrance examination is coming soon,. Unluckily, my grade,dropped,in a short time. Although teachers expected me to be more excellent, I just,felt nervous, increasingly lacking,in,confidence,,about,my,self,. However, a shinning star lighted my life,——,Mike came to help me.,,He,stayed with me when I was almost completely disappointed,in,myself.,“,I,still remember you,’ve got first place many times before, you are always incredible, and it still is,. Come on,,pick,,yourself up! You can get it!” After that, I was gradually confident and worked,harder,, because I know they,expect,a lot from me,,,I,,have no excuse to let them down. I’m really getting better because of Mike.,Everyone needs help, because everyone faces,,problems. What we can do is to help others and,thanks,for help, being a positive and helpful person to light others’hearts.,junior,of,删除，累赘,at,cheer,expected me a lot,thank,,,开头出彩，从物联系到人，且点题,,结尾呼题，且升华合理得当,Flowers grow with sunshine’s,32,,All people live together on the earth from ancient times to the present. And no one could deal with everything well without others,',help so far.,Ancient people lived together to help each other, so they created many things for humans because they pulled together. Now, our parents, teachers and friends help us when we have difficulties. I still remember I had a fight with my mother and we didn,',t talk for a long time. I felt helpless and didn,',t know how to do. So I asked my friends for help. They came up with a good idea for me and also cheered me up. That moved me a lot.,I suddenly realized help is a kind of love between people, it spreads warmth in our life.,From then on,,I felt happier and more excited than I did before when I help others because everyone needs help and should help others. I decided to make our life warmer.,,写作手法独特，反向点题,,标点应用不当，导致句子不完整,,From then on, I feel happier and more excited than I did before when I help others. At the same time, in order to make our life better and warmer, everyone needs help.,写作手法独特，反向点题 标点应用不当，导致句子不完整,33,,Nowadays, most of people are kind, but there still someone is,,selfish, they even never help others.,For this, I just want to say, everyone needs help.,,In the past , I thought that I could do everything just by myself ,but one thing had changed my idea ,About two years ago ,I found my English had not improved .At first , I just wanted to solve it by myself ,but after that ,my performance still didn,',t improve ,even slowly dropped. At that time , my friend Amy helped with me .She not only told me a good way to study English , but also studied with me . With her help, my English performance has improved a lot.,,Everyone has different abilities. To solve problems, we have to pull together.,No matter how excellent a person is, he can,',t solve everything only by himself.,Everyone needs help,,only,depending on the strength of the team can help us achieve the goal.,,Everyone has different abilities to solve problem, so we have to pull together.,especially,描述细腻到位,Everyone has different abil,34,常见错误类型：,1.,审题不清,2.,拼写错误,3.,表达混乱,4.,名词单复数的问题,5.,句子逻辑不清，缺少成分,6.,代词误用,7.,缺少动词,8.,前后不一致（数、时态、代词、主谓）,9.,搭配不当,10.,标点使用不当,,常见错误类型：1.审题不清,35,,语义表达不清，句子不流畅,,Once a time, I do not know to ask for help that I can not always solve problem.,Once,upon,a time, I don' t know how to ask for help ,,so,I can not solve,problems,easily.,语义表达不清，句子不流畅Once a time, I do,36,短语搭配不当,①,动词,+,介词短语,hear,from,(,收到,...,来信）,≠ hear,of/ about,,听说,eg. I often,hear from,my parents.,take care,of,,照顾,take care,当心，小心,②介词短语,在那时,,in,that time,（错,),,在某天,,in,one day (,错）,at,that time,on,one day,③动词,+,名词短语,do,homework,做家庭作业,make,a cake,制作蛋糕,receive,a letter,收到一封信,accept,invitation,接受邀请,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,短语搭配不当②介词短语at that timeon one,37,四、,作文拓展延申及赏析,The Greatest Help,提示：初中三年马上就要结束了，三年的时光一定给你留下了很多挥之不去的记忆。

什么人给了你最大的帮助？你取得了哪些进步？有什么感想或受到了哪些启发？请以“The Greatest Help”为题，写一篇英语短文要求：1. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；,2. 文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,四、作文拓展延申及赏析The Greatest Help中考,38,The Greatest Help,I have got lots of help in my life，and my father gives me the greatest help of all.,I still remember one thing that happened between my father and me. Once,,,we climbed the mountain on a sunny day. On the halfway,,,I felt that the weather was so hot that I didn't want to continue. Then my father told me life is like climbing the mountain. No matter what difficulties we meet，we should face them bravely instead of running away. Hearing these words,,,I decided to keep going on.,From then on,,,I realized that courage could beat difficulties.,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,The Greatest Help中考英语高分作文攻略写事课,39,Homework,一、整理笔记,1.,中考英语写作思路及流程（,10-25,页）,2.,常见英语作文的错误类型（,35-37,页）,,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,Homework一、整理笔记中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件42,40,,,My Happiness,提示：幸福是什么？幸福可能是同学间互相帮助的感动，幸福也可能是老师赞扬时内心的激动，幸福也可能是父母一个细微的举动。

请你以“My Happiness”为题，叙述一件发生在你生活中的令你感到幸福的事要求：1. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；,2. 文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计二、写作练兵,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,,41,Thank you!,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,Thank you!中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件42张中考英,42,,1.,沈,从文的创作风格趋向浪漫主义，他要求小说的诗意效果，融写实、纪梦、象征于一体，语言格调古朴，句式简峭、主干突出，单纯而又厚实，朴讷而又传神，具有浓郁的地方色彩，凸现出乡村人性特有的风韵与神采,2,.,沈,从文创作的小说主要有两类，一种是以湘西生活为题材，一种是以都市生活为题材，前者通过描写湘西人原始、自然的生命形式，赞美人性美；后者通过都市生活的腐化堕落，揭示都市自然人性的丧失,3,.,,从作者的描述看，作者的观察敏锐，记忆超强，对现象世界十分倾心，对大自然的声音、气味，社会上的人与事怀有浓厚的兴趣他把大自然与社会生活称为一本“大书”，他从这本“大书”中学到了许多书本上没有的东西，他在自然和社会中倾心体验，尊重生命本真的做法，并非不爱学习，而是为了更好的学习,。

4,.,不少,评论家觉得沈从文擅长写景，且晴朗明澈，但是缺少深度也有评论家认为好就好在没有深度，因为没有深度的“看”风景，其实就不为一般的社会价值所局限，这样也就抛弃了自以为是的优越感和置身事外的位置，而是在宇宙万汇的动静之中“看”,5,.,一,次眼光看风景万物，多了一份包涵和宽容，看到的历史也就不是战争、王朝更迭之类的东西，而是千百年来凡夫俗子们的哀乐、努力和命运它们代表了更为,现实,逼真的生存和价值,6,.,抒发,的感情真诚感人，不写自己的品学兼优、勤奋用功，而是如实地展现自己的天生的野性，充满了阅读和学习“生活”这本大书,所得到,的欢欣鼓舞的生命体验，表现了对自然和生命,无比,好奇和热爱以及泰然面对一切残忍和苦难的生活观,7,.,,学习了这篇传记让我们了解到了沈从文从小如何“读社会这本大书”，感受到他青春期的悲欢得失由于传主生活经历的太多苦难，加上作者在回忆中不时融入淳厚的情感，让我们读来有某种沉重与辛酸，也让我们学生受到启发：对于强者，生活中的风霜雨雪也和阳光雨露一样，都从不同侧面或者以不同的方式滋润着我们的生命，现实中的曲折、坎坷、苦难可能拓展人的精神空间，让人能更加以阔大的心胸与坚强的意志，去感受生命，理解生活的意义,。

中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,中考英语高分作文攻略写事课件,42,张,1.沈从文的创作风格趋向浪漫主义，他要求小说的诗意效果，融,43,。