高考英语书面表达分析.ppt

2008年高考英语书面表达阅卷分析,2007年与2008年高考书面表达阅卷情况比较,相同点,不同点,2007年平均分为11.56 （35分满） 2008年平均分为11.46 （35分满）,平均分低,评分标准一致,2007年、2008年评分标准均为： 1.以要点内容定档次 2.以语言质量定分数2008年可看上下文决定是否缺要点， 2007年只看几个关键词没有就视为缺要点2.2008年开放作文三判规定为2分以上， 2007年开放作文三判规定为3分以上情 景 作 文,假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为 “Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程 注意：词数不少于60 提示词：游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin,情景作文,给分档次,一档文： （18-20分） 二档文： （15-17分） 三档文： （12-14分） 四档文： （ 6-11分） 五档文： （ 1-5 分） 六档文： （ 0 分） 注：情景作文字数少于60, 扣分情景作文,内容要点及细节,要点：讨论 细节： 去游乐园 划船 爬山 决定去爬山,情景作文,内容要点及细节,2. 要点：爬山 细节： 携带吃、喝 天气 风景 进行竞赛- 看谁先到山顶,情景作文,内容要点及细节,3.要点： 捡拾垃圾（可捡拾自己的也可捡拾别人的） 细节： 一路走，一路捡，要有对场面的描写,情景作文,内容要点及细节,4. 要点：投放垃圾 细节： 垃圾分类：可回收 和不可回收,情景作文,评卷给分的细节要求,1. 阅卷中不要通过找单词去找要点， 一定要从上下文来找要点。

2. 阅卷重点放在用完整、准确的句子去表达思想上，满篇没有正确句 子，一样打0分 3. 所有要点齐全的进三档（12分以上），要保证要点和细节相互支撑 4. 少一个细节的进三档上线（14分），可以视其语言状况+1或-1分 （说明该学生最高可得15分，最低可得13分） 5. 少两个细节进三档下线（12分），可以视其语言状况+1或-1分（说明该 学生最高可得13分，最低得11分） 6. 行文中图的先后顺序有误或人称错误的直接进四档（6-11分） 7. 文章不能以投放垃圾作为结束，要加上一个合情合理的结尾，否则要 在所得分数中扣-1分 8. 一档或二档文的确定要依文章的上下文连贯、紧凑，以及语言质量来决 定 9. 要点和细节可出现在一句话中 10. 写落款、题目或称呼的都忽略不计，按照正常情况给分情景作文,Last week our Class1 Senior 3 in Red Star High school had an unusual spring outing. The day before we left, our classmates had a heated discussion about the destination of the outing. Some students suggested the amusement park, while others preferred boating and mountain climbing. When it came to practice, we were having a good time climbing at last. However, at the top of the mountain, we were angry rather than shocked to find out that loads of rubbish were discovered everywhere . Meanwhile, it came to our mind that we had to clean this mess up. Thus, after recycling the rubbish in different bins, we were all very cheerful that we not only returned the beauty back to the mountain, but also had a wonderful spring outing.,漏掉了第二幅图这个要点，只能进四档，但其语言较好故+1分，总分为12。

情景作文,Last week, the students in my class decided to go out for a spring outing. Some of us wanted to go to the amusement park. Some wanted to go boating and some wanted to climb the mountain. Finally we decided to climb the mountain. I was a shiny day. All of us were happy. But when we reached the top of the mountain. We found that rubbish everywhere! We picked the rubbish and threw them into the dustbin. I think, we shouldnt threw the rubbish everywhere and we should do our best to protect the environment. The more we do, the more beautiful the earth will be!,情景作文,第二幅图少要点, 第四图少细节,语言表述缺乏准确性和逻辑性，影响了对所写内容的理解。

9分,Last week our class organized a spring outing. To make this memorable activity more wonderful, we discussed the destination carefully and finally decided to go mountain-climbing instead of other choices like playing in an amusement park and going boating. With high spirits, we started our spring outing on a fine day. Flowers presented us with their sweetest smiles and we were soaked up in the warm sunshine. However, we were shocked when we reached the top of the mountain. Wasted bottles and used packages were thrown everywhere which totally ruined the beauty of the nature. Feeling a great pity for the tourists, we picked up the rubbish and carefully divided them into two groups：recycle ones and the non-recycle ones. After that, we put the rubbish into the bin differently. We call on awareness on protecting our environment which is of great importance. Though clearing up the rubbish was a tough task, our hearts were filled with joy and we will remember this outing for ever.,内容要点齐全，描述语句丰富，上下文连贯，有效地使用了语句间的链接成分，只有个别用词错误，体现了较强的语言运用能力。

19分,情景作文,Last week, there was a heated discussion on where to go for our spring outing. Some students wanted to go to amusement park, some considered to go boating and others gave their ideas for climbing. Eventually, we decided to take a climb. The next day, all of us prepared well. With our enjoyment, each of us climbed the mountain full of energy. However, when we got to the top of the mountain, what covered our eyes first was the mass of rubbish. It was really a pity that the rubbish destroyed a beautiful scenery. At last, we made up our mind to pick up the rubbish. After a while, with everyones effort, the rubbish was cleared off immediately and we put them into the recycled and unrecycled bins. In my eyes, this spring outing not only gave us lots of pleasure, but also gave us a meaningful lesson. Only to protect our environment, can we get a beautiful society. Therefore, I hope everyone can join us to make our home clean and tidy.,情景作文,覆盖了所有内容要点 ，语法和用词能够满足任务要求，篇章较为连贯，有少许语言错误。

16分,Last week, our class had a spring outing, which the whole class think was quite meaningful. When getting prepared for the activity, we had a heated discussion about where to go . Opinions divided among the students. Some students suggested we go to the amusement park to get relaxed, while others recommended that we go boating. Finally, most of the students agreed to go hiking. On a sunny day, my class gathered at the foot of the mountain, and everyone looked so exited. Whil。