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12011 年“问题与建议表达”相关作文题1.中考英语作文写 “money”今天上午，北京市 2011 年中考英语试题新鲜出炉，作文题目保持了北京市中考英语作文题目的一贯出题风格 --- 形式灵活、内容生活化让考生着实很难在考前有一个准确的预测命题形式：今年的中考作文题目岁仍然以书信形式，即“假如你是 XXX，你的美国朋友XXX 给你写了一封信，请你根据来信内容，写一封回信…”作文原题：成长中每个人都要面对烦恼，并解决问题假设你叫刘明，是美国中学生爱丽丝的朋友你收到了她的电子邮件，请给她回复，回答她的问题，提出你的建议，并就此事谈谈你的看法2内容要点：1. 回答她的问题2. 提出建议3. 对于此事谈谈你的看法来信内容简要说明：Alice 表示自己的好友 Angela 问自己借钱，但自己不知是否该借给她，担心对方可能不能归还问刘明是否遇到同样的问题？请刘明给自己一些建议，期待回信整体分析：今年的作文题目较往年而言，总体来说变化较大3从 2007 年-2010 年的题目来看，回信的形式出现过两次，分别为 2007 年的大纲卷和 2010年中考题，但是，与这两次不同之处在于，这两次的来信内容，非常明显地暗示考生所写回信的观点走向。

如：2007 年来信暗示考生所写回信内容基本为建议对方不要太痴迷于影星，而应该多在自己的学习上努力；2010 年来信中明确表示听说北京的公交服务很好，题目中也说明“并介绍北京良好的公交服务”众多考生所写作文内容差别不大，多为积极向上的观点而今年的考题，出现了前所未见的貌似说明文，但含有部分议论文的形式即：回信中建议对方“借” 或“不借”由考生自己拟定，来信中没有明确暗示由考生自己选择，只要能够言之有理，逻辑通顺，总体观点积极向上，就不会出错而说到内容，虽然 2011 年海淀区一模的作文题目“对于中学生如何支配自己的零用钱”中提到了 “money”，而东城一模作文题目“My Best Friend” 提到了 “friendship”，4但是像今年中考作文题目中提到的“面对好友，Alice 是否该借钱给她” 处理对于朋友的信任和金钱之间的关系，实属有些出乎大家的意料之外既贴近学生的日常生活，避开了考前大家常常会练习到的“环保”、“抗灾”等大话题，又形式灵活，给考生的发挥空间越来越大从而考生在进入考场之前准备的常见话题的经典句子，貌似无用武之地体现了北京市中考题旨在考察学生的逻辑，即文章只要要点齐全，逻辑通顺，句式灵活多变，所表达观点明确，所得分数就不会低。

解题思路：依旧牢记“结构、要点、逻辑、语法、亮点”五大要素，审题一定要仔细，看准题目中的要点为：回答她的问题；提出建议；对于此事谈谈你的看法1. 结构、要点文章第一部分，首先要做的就是在来信中找问题，很明显，只有一个问句”Do you meet things like this?” ，所以作文中应该开门见山：I have met things like this. / I 5have never met things like this. 而且，来信的第一句话为” I’m so sad 所以第一部分内容可以表示安慰 “ Don’t worry” 或者表示理解对方的感受 “I can understand you文章第二部分，根据第二个要点，提出建议可能涉及到如下几种建议，如：l If it’s not a lot of money, you can lend it to her如果钱不多的话，可以借给她)l If she wants to borrow a lot of money from you, you’d better suggest her to ask her parents for help. (如果她想要借很多钱的话，你最好建议她去问她的父母寻求帮助)l If you decide to help her, then trust her, because she is your close friend。

如果你决定把钱借给她的话，就要信任她，因为她是你的好朋友)6文章第三部分，根据第三个要点，谈谈自己的感受，其实，也就是回答”why”，即：为什么要给出如上建议的原因如：l Friendship is more important than money, if your close friend needs help, you are supposed to give him / her a hand and trust him / her. (友谊和信任比金钱更重要，如果你的好朋友需要帮助，你应该帮助他/她，并且给予信任)l We students don’t have jobs to earn money but depend on our parents, when we need some money, it’s always a better choice to ask our parents for help instead of turn to our friends. Meanwhile, we should be honest to our parents. (我们学生没有工作，不挣钱，需要依赖我们的父母。

当我们需要用钱的时候，问父母要总比问同学借要好同时，我们应该对父母要保持诚实)2. 逻辑如果考生能够找全题目要点，并且按照要点所给顺序写下来，结构清晰，那么逻辑应该7是通顺的因为全文基本是按照如下思路：现身说法，对于对方所遇到的问题表示理解 --- 提出建议 --- 说明感受，即说明所提建议的原因其中，可以使用大量的逻辑连词和状语从句表示因果、条件、转折等逻辑关系3. 语法、亮点根据题目要求，回信文体形式大体为说明文，议论参半，所以下笔前首先确定文章时态大体为一般现在时态由于文章话题属于生活化细节问题，所以文章内容一般不涉及难度过大的词或句子，只要句式灵活多变，用词准确、丰富，逻辑通顺，语法完全正确，多用词组，向批卷老师呈现出扎实的语法功底和丰富的词汇量，也就是文章的亮点所在One possible version：Hi！Alice ,I'm glad to hear from you．Yes，I sometimes have the same problem．I think if she really needs the money，you'd better lend it to her．You 8don't need to worry too much．She'll probably pay you back when she has money．If you don't lend her the money，I'm afraid you may lose the friend．I think everyone may have trouble in life and we should help each other．So when my friends need money，I will try my best to help them．Maybe I'll get it back，or maybe I won't．I hope what I said can help you．Yours，Liu Ming2.昌平中考英语一模：假如你叫 Sally，是英国中学生 Betty 的笔友，你收到了她的来信。

请给她写一封回信，回答她的问题，并为她提些建议Subject: I have a problem.Receiver: sally;Time: 2011. 4. 21 10:25 (Thursday)9Sender: betty;Dear Sally,I have a problem now. Next Monday morning, I have to give a short speech at the school meeting and I'm very nervous. You know, I'm afraid of facing so many people. I have never spoken to so many people. I think I'm going to give up. But all my teachers, classmates and my parents say it is a good chance for me to practice. What shall I do if I forget my words? And if my face turns red? Do you have any good ideas? Please, please tell me as soon as possible.Many thanks.Yours,Betty题目分析：1.体裁：根据英文来信写回信，同时考察写作和阅读能力102.时态：来信为一般现在时，回信还是一般现在时3.要点（假如你叫 xxx，是英国学生 xxx 的笔友，你收到他/她的来信，请给他/她写一封回信） ，1） 回答他 /她的问题，来信中有三个问号，即有三个问题2） 并为他 /她提建议（两到三个即可）官方范文：Dear BettyThank you for your letter. I am glad you have such a good chance to practice. Congratulations! I think you can practice your speech again and again until you can speak enough. So you will be sure you can do it well and won't forget the words. When you speak, imagine you were speaking to some trees or couldn't see the people. For the red face, don't you think you 11will look more beautiful? I hope you will make an excellent speech.YoursSally回答三个问题：1.I think you can practice your speech again and again until you can speak enough. So you will be sure you can do it well and won't forget the words.2.For the red face, don't you think you will look more beautiful?3.建议：1）I think you can practice your speech again and again until you can speak enough. So you will be sure you can do it well and won't forget the words.2）When you speak, imagine you were speaking to some trees or couldn't see the people.123）For the red face, don't you think you will look more beautiful?文章内容结构：第一句表示收到来信很开心，属于回信文章的套路。