Poppy写作训练指导读后续写课件.ppt

什么是读后续写？什么是读后续写？•提供一篇提供一篇350词左右的阅读材料（一般是记叙词左右的阅读材料（一般是记叙文，且以事件发生的时间为序）文，且以事件发生的时间为序）•根据该材料的内容情节等，续写两段，根据该材料的内容情节等，续写两段，150词词左右左右（（每个段落都给出了第一句），每个段落都给出了第一句），将其发展将其发展为一篇逻辑合理情节完整的短文为一篇逻辑合理情节完整的短文1读后续写考查什么？读后续写考查什么？核心素养：核心素养：–思维品质：思维品质：想象能力想象能力和创新精和创新精神神–语言能力：语言能力：阅读和写阅读和写作作•具体说来，四个方面：具体说来，四个方面：–把握短文关键信把握短文关键信息和语言特点的息和语言特点的能力能力–创造性思维能力创造性思维能力–对语篇结构的把对语篇结构的把控能力控能力–语言运用的准确语言运用的准确性和丰富性性和丰富性2评分细则评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档（21-25分）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理内容丰富所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。

第四档（16-20分）与所给短文融合度较高，与所提供的 各段落开头语衔接较为合理内容比较丰富所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑第三档（11-15分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供的 各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了若干有关内容应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯第二档（6-10分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了一些有关内容语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性第一档（1-5分）与所提供的短文和开头语的衔接较差产出内容较少语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容连贯与原文剧情与原文剧情融洽，逻辑融洽，逻辑合理合理续写内容丰续写内容丰富有看点富有看点语法结构和语法结构和词汇多样准词汇多样准确确语句间衔接语句间衔接自然，结构自然，结构紧凑紧凑3Reading ①“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.②His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.③The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”④The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.⑤They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”⑥“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy.” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”⑦It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.Reading for basic informationWho What WhenWhereWhy How Parents, the boy, Poppy, a little dogParents and Poppy felt sad.After the boy went to university At homeThe boy left for the university.?Reading for plot①“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.②His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.③The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”④The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.⑤They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”⑥“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy.” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”⑦It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.Sad departureBad mood New idea? The development of the storySad departure Bad mood New idea?sadhappyReading for language  ①“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.②His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.③The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”How do you know they felt sad at the boy’s departure?①“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.②His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.③The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”unwilling/reluctant to separateTip1: Show a vivid scene of departure through subtle description of action.Reading for language  How do you know they were in a bad mood?④The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.⑤They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”④The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.⑤They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”in low spiritsTip1: Show a vivid scene of sadness through subtle description of action.Reading for characters ①“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.②His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.③The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”The boy: grown-up/consideratedefeatParents: care for…/depend on… Tip2: Understand the characters before writing.loveloveReading for theme ④The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.⑤They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.” Poppy: miss the boy/depend on the boyloveParents: got worried about PoppyTip3: Understand the theme before writing.Reading the given sentences⑥It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box. she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.Para.1 Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.Para.2 A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. a sweet little dogthe boy Tip4: Catch hints from the given sentences.Reading the given sentencesPara.1 Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.Para.2 A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. ØWhat was Poppy’s reaction? How did Poppy feel?ØWhat about the little dog?ØWhat would the two dogs do?ØHow did parents feel?Ø…ØDid Poppy still love the boy?ØWhat did the boy do when meeting Poppy?ØWhat was the boy’s reaction to the puppy?ØWhat might parents do/say?Ø…Puppy Poppy Parents loveTip4: Catch hints from the given sentences.Puppy Poppy Parents loveThe boy Writing When writing, keep the following tips in mind.description of action.Tip1: Try to show a vivid scene through subtle description of the characters’ action or words. Tip2: Try to understand the characters.Tip3: Try to catch the theme before writing. Tip4: Try to find as many hints as possible from the text. Tip5: Read the last paragraph and the given sentences more carefully.One possible version Para.1 Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. Poppy stared at the puppy, surprised and excited. She approached cautiously, barked and then started to lick his face. The little dog jumped out of the box, wagged his tail and barked in a friendly way. He sniffed every corner of the new home, and then ran around Poppy, which brought great joy to the old girl. Watching the happy scene, Dad and Mom looked at each other, beaming proudly.  Para.2 A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. As he entered the doorstep, Poppy trotted to him and got up on his back legs, trying to lick her old friend. The boy crouched, put his arms round Poppy’s neck and scratched her behind the ears. Suddenly, he noticed a little head poke out of the kennel. He felt so puzzled that he turned to his parents. “We’ve got the puppy for Poppy. Now she is as cheerful as before.” Mom chuckled with delight. “What a good idea!” The boy hugged both dogs, smiling. —By Daisy Plot Language Theme Thank you!。