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初三上英语单元考试优秀作文选三201-202雾霾（haze）是一种大气污染中国的雾霾越来越严重了请以“The Haze in China”为题，写一篇90词左右的短文，客观地简介中国雾霾的现状，雾霾的危害以及如何减少雾霾初三2班 陈钰铭The Haze in ChinaHaze is a kind of air pollution. The haze problem in China is becoming more and more serious, especially in Beijing. It has caused many problems.The haze is mainly caused by factories. It does great harm to people. People who live in the haze always have breathing problems. The haze makes the air dirty and people hardly see clearly on the road. Therefore, more traffic accidents happen because of the haze.Since the haze is harmful to both the environment and human beings, we must do everything we can to reduce it. Here are some suggestions: First, we should ride bikes more often instead of driving cars. The cars produce too much harmful gas when working. Second, people oughtn’t to burn waste, because it also harms the air quality. Third, we should plant more trees to clean the air. In short, I hope the haze problem can be solved as soon as possible.教师点评： 1、行文流畅，构造合理清晰。

2、擅于使用刚学的新词组来给文章润色初三年3班 林滟雯The Haze in ChinaIf you go to Beijing, Shanghai or other big cities in China now, all that you can see will be gray cloudy sky and smog everywhere. But it’s not smog; it’s the haze, a kind of harmful air pollution. This terrible phenomenon is becoming more and more serious in China.The haze can cause many kinds of breathing problems, even lung disease. It’s great of harm to people’s health.So how can we defeat this killer of health?First and foremost, everyone had better not drive cars often, and ride a bike instead. Second, the factories should reduce the discharge of gas. Last but not least, the government ought to plant more trees.If we can follow the rules above, our air will be clearer and our world will be better.教师点评：本文语言流畅，句型多样，能紧扣题目规定，写出自己的观点。

例如在论述观点时，使用了First and foremost（首要的是）…, Second, …Last but not least（最后但同样重要的是）…体现了作者灵活的句式运用能力 初三年4班 陈铭尔The Haze in China①It’s reported that the haze in China has become more and more serious. The air in many places is bad because of the haze. It’s important for human beings to have fresh air. However, many people in China don’t have. What’s worse, the haze can cause cancer. How terrible! ②So, we should do something to change the situation.First, we can plant more trees, because trees can clean the air. Second, we must stop using　many chemicals. In China, some factories use too many chemicals and they produce much terrible gas. Third, our government can make laws against air pollution. Anyone who breaks the laws will be punished.③As the saying goes, “Not a clean environment, the living conditions favorable meaningless.” From now on, Let’s do everything we can to reduce the haze!教师点评：本文非常清晰的论述了雾霾的现状、危害及解决措施。

好的开头（①句）+ 自然连贯的过度词句（however; what’s worse, 句②） +  引用名言的结尾（句③译为：没有一种清洁的环境，再优裕的生活条件也无意义 好文章初三5班 王哲轶The Haze in ChinaIn recent years, the haze has appeared in many parts of China, including Beijing. In a city where air pollution is serious, when the wind blows strongly, the haze may form in a short while.The haze does great harm to people’s health. It can cause people to have a breathing problem, even cancer. What’s worse, the traffic can be much more dangerous because the drivers can not see clearly. As a result, there may be more accidents in such bad weather.To change the situation, planting more trees is a good way. And people had better go out on foot instead of driving a car. On the other hand, the government has a duty to stop factories producing too much terrible gas.In short, solving the problem of haze needs everyone’s efforts.教师点评：本文行文流畅，层次分明。

文中恰如其分地使用某些好词好句，使得文章读起来脍炙人口初三6班 刘怡昕The Haze in ChinaHaze is a kind of air pollution, and it’s more and more serious in China especially in Beijing. It not only causes people to have breathing problems but also causes traffic accidents. So it has bad effects on our health as well as our daily life.The government has done something to reduce haze, but it’s not enough. More should be done by us. First, we can encourage our friends to use cars less and use bicycles more. Second, we can plant trees to make the air fresher. Third, we can write to the local government to ask them to stop factories producing harmful gas.In a word, we should do our best to reduce haze. Although one person can do a bit, many persons can do a lot.教师点评：本文语句通顺，中心明确，体现对的。

连词运用得恰到好处结尾简洁有力，画龙点睛！初三7班 庄煜权The Haze in China As we know, the haze in China has appeared for many years. It has become one of the most serious problems in many big cities. The haze is a kind of air pollution. It is harmful to people’s health and makes us be in a bad mood. We can hardly breathe as usual because of it. What’s worse, it may cause more accidents because drivers can’t see clearly on the road. What should we do to reduce the haze? First, I think we should come to understand the importance of protecting the environment。