读后续写给岁母亲的礼物.ppt

读后续写讲评 一 原文分析 WHO main characters relationship The old lady Myra s mother The postman Myra the old lady s daughter Myra s husband Mayor the old lady s son in law Mrs Morrison maybe the lady s neighbour Mrs Grant the lady s neighbour Johnnie the lady s neighbour Jim maybe one of her relatives WHEN The old lady s eightieth birthday WHERE The old lady s home WHAT It was the lady s eightieth birthday Although she had received many presents from her neighbours she was still looking forward to her daughter s present which she was sure her daughter would never forget Having made full preparations she stood by the window expecting the arrival of the post At last only an envelope from Myra arrived the old lady almost unwillingly tore it open Main characters The old lady Myra Johnnie live alone looked after by her neighbours Myra wouldn t forget her mother s birthday even if she seldom wrote at other times Of course she was busy The old lady was proud of Myra Her herband had been made Mayor and Myra herself had got a medal for her work Perhaps perhaps Myra might come After all eighty was a special birthday The little boy Johnnie had been up with a packet of mints and said he wouldn t go out to play until the post had come successful ambitious diligent selfish lack the sense of responsibility She may feel regreful for not attending to her mom His company comforts the old lady s heart Contrast to highlight the old lady s loneliness Or let us reflect on Myra s absence of responsibility to take care of her mom Predict would she come to the party or not The reasonable plot Theme What s the author s purpose of writing this story What s the best gift It is one of the tragedies that children regret in the later days not being able to reward parents love before they pass away Nothing could be better than the company of her daughter 二 每段的开头语分析 用下划线标出关键词 Para1 She stood by the window watching Why did she stand by the window How did she feel while waiting What Who did she watch that could add to the feeling of loneliness excitement hope How long did she watch the sunrise sunset the sun rose sank set down Did she receive a gift or a letter Did her daughter come Who sent her the letter the postman or Johnnie What was his feeling How did she feel seeing the letter Contrast 第一段应该包含以下内容 As the postman passed by a beam of disappointment swept over her Hopes of receiving the present from Myra seemed to be fading away On seeing what Johnnie carried her smile froze abruptly She shook her head with a trembling voice Faced with such a frustrating situation she kept waiting with the expectation fading away However it seemed that God played a trick on her since she recieved the letter when she was almost overwhelmed by a deep sense of despair 段子妍 The shining from eyes faded away which was substituted by the desperation and the numb sense suddenly a rapid sound of footsteps fired her hope again Stared at by the boy with dissatisfaction and suspicion she was at a loss about what to do 储加 明 The shine on her eyes faded away she turning back to the ticken with a heavy gait step Hardly had she decided to cut the cake when the door bell rang The old lady rushed to the door opening it with a trembling hand Suddenly a smile of understanding flashed across her face She hugged the boy tears gathering in her eyes 钱艺 She still fail to catch sight of Myra feeling a sudden surge of disappointment the only fire of expectation fading away When she intended to give up waiting Johnnie rushed upstairs at full speed grasping an envelop firmly 章祎玮 The little boy cast a delighted look on his face as well He stared at the street until the postman came into his sight He ran towards the postman only to be given a letter With a hint of sadness the lady picked up the letter 詹雨 两段话内容如何顺畅衔接及第二句的关键部分 Did her feeling change when she received the envelope How do you know Para2 Almost unwillingly she tore the envelope open her feeling change joy expectation disappointment 续写的第二段要包含以下内容 What was in the envelope There lay a card peacefully which read said How did she feel when seeing the thing s in the envelope Did she see her daughter at length Did she receive some gifts What was the best gift for her What was the end of the story a happy ending a sad ending out of expectation disappointment excitement relief Contrast 四 语言基础 1 随着时间的流逝 2 里面有一张卡片 上面写着 3 一个孤独的身影站在门口 眼中充满了期待 4 一个熟悉的身影出现在门口 眼中含有泪水 5 With Time going by proceeding As time proceeded Inside There lay a card which read said There stood a lonely figure by the door with eyes filled with expectation 独立主格 By the door stood a lonely figure There appeared a familiar figure at the door eyes filled with tears At the door appeared a familiar figure eyes filled with tears A familiar figure came into her sight 四 语言基础 5 房间里很安静 6 突然 7 我很想陪伴你度过生日 8我最想要的是女儿的陪伴 9很抱歉我不能参加生日party 9 The whole room was in silence The whole room was covered with a blancket of silence The whole room was in deadly silence with only the deep breath and the 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