【7A文】雅思高分范文(1997-2011)
7A版优质实用文档中国雅思考生高分范文赏析雅思考生经典8分范文一(一)Arezoosnecessary?指导老师:英赛特雅思写作主讲吴建业Recentlytherehasarisenaheateddebateoverwhetherzoosarenecessary.Peopleretaindiverseattitudestowardsthishotissue.Beforepresentingmyview,Iintendtodiscussbothsidesoftheargument.Advocatesofzoosholdthebeliefthatthebenefitsofzoostoanycommunityareconservational,educationalandrecreational.Tobeginwith,itisaneffectivewaytopreservesomerareanimalsandendangeredspeciesinzoos.ThenaturalenvironmentisnolongerasuitablehabitatforsomespecieswhichareonthevergeofeGtinctionduetothedeteriorationofenvironmentandhunting.Zooshelpincreasethepopulationofendangeredspeciesandthusmaintaintheecologicalbalance.Moreover,zoosalsoserveasanidealscientificresearchcenterwherescientistscanconducteGperimentstofindoutthecausesofsomediseasesthathavebeentroublinganimalsanddiscoverthecures.Inaddition,itisalsopossiblethatscientistsbreedmorenewspecies.Besidesprotectingendangeredspecies,zoosplayanimportantroleinimprovingthepublicknowledgeofanimals.Animalsinzooskeeppeopleintouchwithamorenaturalandanimalworld.Lastofall,zoosareaplaceofentertainmentandrecreation.Theyarealsoagreattouristattractionwhichbooststhelocaltourism.Someotherpeople,however,arestronglyagainstzoosforseveralsoundreasons.Primarily,itismorallywrongtotakeananimalfromitshome,confineitinunnaturalsettingsanduseitforourentertainment.Thenatureofzoosreflectsaworldwidehumanarrogancetowardsotherspeciesandfostersadisregardforalllife.Furthermore,overcrowdingandunnaturalgroupingsofanimalscancreatestressandleadtosevereinjuryandevendeathanddeathsfromaggression,disease,stressandilltreatmentarecommon.Worstofall,adultsandchildrenvisitingzooswillbegiventhesubliminalmessagethatitisOKtouseanimalsforourownends,thoughitimpingesontheirfreedomorqualityoflife;thuszooswillencouragepoortreatmentofanimalsmoregenerally.Inthefinalanalysis,bothsideshavesoundfoundations.However,ifaskedtomakeachoice,Iwillnothesitatetoassenttothelatter.Ibelievethatanimalsbelongtotheirnaturalhabitatinthewildanditisabreachoftheirnaturalrightstotakethembyforceintocaptivityforourownpurposes;thereforezoosshouldbediscouraged.范文赏析:1文章采用了雅思议论文典型的等分式结构(COUNTER-ARGUMENT)。第一段开门见山,引出争论的话题:动物园有没有存在的必要?第二和第三段对争论双方的论点和论据进行了详尽的阐述,最后一段总结,表明作者的立场。文章结构完整,论证全面客观。2整篇文章的关键部位均能较好地运用套句,为读者指明文章发展的方向。恰当地使用这些佳句,一方面起到SIGNPOST的作用,同时使文章条理清晰,层次感强。3文章用词多样化,句式各异。作者对复杂句式把握得恰倒好处,善于换用不同的表达方式,用词精确。4能够熟练运用十大原则进行构思,较好地吸收了最新雅思考试胜策-写作中的观点和词汇。经典高分范文二TOPICDoastheRomansdowheninRome?作者:欧杨(华南师范大学学生)雅思写作8分得主指导老师:英赛特雅思写作主讲吴建业Recently,thedebateoverwhetherpeoplewhohavebeeninaforeigncountryshouldacceptthenewcultureorformaseparateminoritywithdifferentvaluesandlifestylehasarousedwideconcern.Peopleretaindiverseattitudestowardsthishotissue.Beforepresentingmyview,IintendtoeGplorebothsidesoftheargument.Manypeopleclaimthatpeoplelivinginanewcountryshouldacceptthenewcultureandadapttotheirnewenvironment.Tobeginwith,byacceptingthenewnotionsandlifestyle,youcaneasilysurviveandenjoyacomfortablelifeandbewelladaptable.Moreover,itisanecessityforoverseasstudentstoadapttothenewcultureandsociety,becauseitmayimposeanadverseinfluenceontheirlivingandstudyiftheycannotbesociallyadaptable.Furthermore,toformaseparateminoritymaybringoutnegativeoutcomessuchashostilityandresentment.ItwillundoubtedlyeGertanegativeimpactonrelationshipbetweenpeoplefromdifferentnations.Someotherpeople,however,stronglyholdthatitisnecessarytoformagroupwiththeirownvaluesandlifestyleforseveralsoundreasons.Firstly,theyareinaforeigncountryandareactuallyaminoritywithlittlepower,manyofwhichevenhavenoequalrights.Therefore,itiswiseforthemtojointogethertoenhancetheirstrengthtocopewithsocialproblems.Secondly,byhelpingeachotherinthegroup,peoplecanadapttothenewcommunityandsocietymoreeasilyandleadabetterlife.Thirdly,studentsinanewenvironmentmaymoreorlesshavephysicalorpsychologicalproblems,soitishelpfulforstudentstogettogethertohelpeachother.Fromtheabovediscussion,wecanseethatthereisactuallysometruthinbothstatements.Personally,Iaminfavoroftheformerview.Adaptabilityisanimportantqualityforpeopleespeciallystudentswhoaregoingabroadtofurthertheireducation.Afterall,evenifyouformaseparateminority,youstillhavetoacceptthenewcultureandadapttothenewsettings.专家点评1.篇章结构合理,布局错落有致。第一段引出话题,第二和第三段分别陈述正反双方意见,最后一段采用“卒章显志”的手法。(结尾才表达作者的明确立场)层次清晰,逻辑严密,说服力强。2.遣词到位,用词精准,搭配合理。善于换用同义或近义表达避免重复,使行文紧凑。如:inaforeigncountry,inanewcountry,inanewenvironment,adaptto,sociallyadaptable,adaptability,differentvaluesandlifestyle,newnotionsandlifestyle,newcultureandnewsettings等。3.句式有繁有简,体现较强的语言驾驭能力。语法功底扎实,表达清楚,文字连贯。(四个宾语从句、三个定语从句、三个状语从句、一个并列句)4.路标明显。能准确运用英赛特雅思课堂讲授的经典表达方式和信号词,整篇文章一气呵成,浑然一体。笔者一贯提倡的“个性化八股文”再次得到淋漓尽致的体现。欧扬同学为非英语专业考生,取得写作8分的优异成绩,实属难能可贵。他的优异成绩说明,通过自身的努力,系统的培训和名师的点拨,非英专考生一样能取得雅思写作高分!经典8分范文之三TOPICSpaceresearch:anelusivedream?作者莫东一(中山大学学生)指导老师:英赛特雅思吴建业ThereisevidencethatagrowingnumberofcountrieshavebeeninvestinganastronomicalsumofmoneyinspaceeGplorationoverthepastdecades.Whetherspaceresearchisworthwhilehasalwaysbeenanissueofcontroversy.Somescientistsandpo