2018浙江新高考之读后续写continuation writing

Continuation Writing 读 后 续 写,对第五档(21-25)作文的描述： 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落、开头语衔接合理。 内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达； 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑；,Tips for writing:1. Thorough reading 2. Creative plotting（构思） 3. Swift drafting4. Careful polishing5. Neat copying,The present,Reading：,Step 1： Thorough Reading,Opening paragraph:They say that blood is thicker than water, that our relatives are more important to us than others. Everyone was so kind to the old lady on her birthday. Surely her daughter would make an even bigger effort to please her?,2. The old lady,1. others,3. her daughter,？,Para. 1-51. What did others do to please the old lady? Mrs. MorrisonMrs. GrantJohnnie2. What did the old lady do to celebrate her 80s birthday? What did she expect?,1. Others:Mrs. Morrison:gave the flat an extra cleanbought a card and a bunch of marigoldsMrs. Grant:made a cakeprepared the afternoon teaJohnnie:gave a packet of mintsoffered to bring up her presents,2. the old lady:got up early to be ready for the postput on her best dress,Language appreciation: a good way to describe ones mental activities(Para. 4) Two spots of color brightened her cheeks. She was excited like a child. She would enjoy her day.,She was so eager to get a present.,“A person was very nervous.”,His heart was beating wildly.,He was sweating all over.,she expected：（Para. 6),a present,family affections;love from the daughter;to be rememberedto be connected,3. Myra, the daughter （Para.2-3 )Judging from the information in Para. 2-3 about Myra, what kind of person was Myra?,Key words：rare occasionsseldom wrotebusya medal for the aged,2. The old lady,1. others,3. Myra,？,Puzzle:Would Myra please her mother or let her down?,Step 2： Creative plotting,Reminder：Being creative doesnt mean you can write whatever you like. Continuation writing must be designed in a logical and reasonable way. And on top of that being creative will be appreciated.,logic,+,creativity,They say.Everyone kindher daughter.?rare occasionsseldom a medal best clothes excitedMrs. Morrison Mrs. Grant Johnnie. slippercardiganlamp,She stood by the window, watching. _ _Almost reluctantly (unwillingly)she tore the envelope open._,Would Myra please her mother or let her down?,Myra,？,She stood by the window, watching. _ _Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. _,Use at least 5 of the following words: please, postman, arrange for, lovely,parcels, write, birthday, presents,Step 3： Swift drafting,Original ending:She stood by the window, watching. The postman turned round the corner on his bicycle. Her heart beat fast. Johnnie had seen him too and ran to the gate. Then clatter, clatter up the stairs. Johnnie knocked at her door. “Granny, granny,” he shouted, “Ive got your post. ”He gave her four envelopes. Three were unsealed cards from old friends. The fourth was sealed, in Myras writing. The old lady felt a pang of disappointment. “No parcel, Johnnie?” “No, granny.” Maybe the parcel was too large to come by letter post .That was it .It would come later by parcel post. She must be patient.,Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. Folded in the card was a piece of paper. Written on the card was a message under the printed Happy BirthdayBuy yourself something nice with the cheque, Myra and Harold. The cheque fluttered to the floor like a bird with a broken wing. Slowly the old lady stooped to pick it up. Her present, her lovely present. With trembling fingers she tore it into little bits.,Summary:1. What the best continuation articles are likecontent；language2. Suggested procedure for writing;,Tips for writing:1. Thorough reading： 2. Creative plotting3. Swift drafting4. Careful polishing5. Neat copying,3. A question to ponder:“How to treat our parents”“Listen to your father, who gave you life, and do not look down upon your mother when she is old.”Bible Proverbs 23:22,我的续写思路基于以下几点： 标题是礼物，这个礼物在文章末尾以怎么样的形式出现必然是文章高潮部分； 血浓于水。每个周围的人都对这个老太那么好，这个女儿会做更大的努力让妈妈高兴吗？开篇留下这样的悬念，当然可以是悲剧结尾，也可以是大团圆结局。 老太的女儿的工作跟老年人有关，而因此得到一个奖项，我们可以把此点理解成一种讽刺。也可以为我要写的结局埋下伏笔。,She stood by the window, watching. The postman came as usual. The old ladys heart beat wildly. How she wished for a special present from her daughter! Then came the knock. There was Johnnie, with several envelopes. No parcels at all! Her heart sank! She scanned the envelopes swiftly, most of which were birthday cards from her lifelong friends. Then she picked out the one from her daughter.Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. “Dear mum, sorry to have let you down so many times whether on your birthdays or other occasions. I got a medal for my work for the aged, but I dont think I deserve it. For so long Ive neglected the most lovely aged person in my life, who needs my care and company. I know its time to ” Reading the letter, the old lady couldnt help but sob. Tears ran down her cheeks and dropped onto the letter. Just at that moment, familiar steps drew closer and without doubt, the old lady knew that her most cherished present was finally coming.,