作文教学指导

Step OneEnjoy a good passage.Enjoy readingTask 1 Enjoy a good passage.Our monitor suggests that we have “Friday News Hour”. I do think that it is a good idea.As is known to us all, we students are kept busy all day long. Little do we know what is happening both at home and abroad, let alone what we can do for our country. By reading newspapers we can get more information about the world outside. In my opinion, “Friday News Hour” can broaden our mind and enrich our school life in a way. Whats more, it will help us improve our reading skills.As for my suggestion, I think its better to have news hour twice a week. And we should make a choice about what well read. Im sure everyone will benefit a lot from this activity.broaden our mindenrich ourmake a choice benefit a lotAs is known to us all,Whats moreAs for my suggestiondo Little do we what is happening both at let alone what we can do for ourIts better to have newsOutline:1.your opinion about “”2.supporting your opinion3.your suggestion about “”How is it a good passage?Fixed patternsEffective linking wordsComplicated grammar patternsStep TwoHow to compose a good passage ?Focus on第二节：书面表达（满分25分） 某网站最近在网上征集“全民节约”活动的建议。你班学 生对此进行讨论。以下是讨论结果。请以李华的名义给 网站写一封信。信的开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数 （词数：120左右）。参考词汇：一次性的throw-away 回收站：recycle station Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to share the ideas of National ThriftAction。 .社会现现状我们们的建议议 1、饭饭店餐馆馆使用一次性筷子和 塑料袋。1、建议饭议饭店不使用一次性工具 。 2、车辆车辆增多，原油短缺，价格 上涨涨。2、建议议上学上班骑骑自行车车3、每年有大量纸纸被扔掉了，造 成大量浪费费。3、增加废纸废纸回收，在学校办办公 场场所设设回收站。 4、处处处处存在浪费电现费电现 象。4、“少开一盏盏灯；合理调节调节空 调调温度”。Look closely at the requirements.Task 2 writingLets follow the first step:抓- 抓准要点，勾勒大纲Suggestions:BodyWasting phenomena:1.overused chopsticks and plastic bags2.Shortage of oil3.thrown-away paper4.Electricity wasting1.no offering to restaurants2. Go to school by bike3. more recyle stations4.Turn on less ligntOutline 1 of the writing:Introduction paragraph: Conclusion paragraph: Lets follow the second step:扩- 紧扣要点，扩写成句Body1.overuse chopsticks and plastic bags2.cause the shortage of 3.be throw away4.waste electricity1. not offer to people2. go to school by bike3. more recyle stations4.turn on less lightExpand the points into sentences:Wasting electricity is common everywhereThe restaurant shouldnt offer throw-away chopsticks to people.governments should also set up more recycle stations at the public places.one shall turn on less light and turn air-conditioner one more degree up in summer and down in winter.Many restaurants use throw-away chopsticks and plastic bags. more cars run on the road, and they cause the shortage of oil supply.Every year much paper is thrown away . . I suggest going to school or work by bike.一、写作中句型灵活转换,避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式: More cars run on the road, and they cause the shortage of oil.With more cars running on the road,the gasoline is in short supply.A. 用with+宾语+宾补结构合并为简单句Tips for expanding the points into sentences:B. 合并为复合句A lot of trees are cut down to produce paper, but much paper is thrown away every year. Every year much paper is thrown away ,whichmakes more trees cut down to produce paper . 一、写作中句型灵活转换,避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式: Tips for expanding the points into sentences:We can go to school or go to work by bike so that we can help to reduce oil. Going to school or work by bike, we canhelp to save gasoline.C. 用分词短语作状语：一、写作中句型灵活转换,避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式: Tips for expanding the points into sentences:In a word, we should start things about conserving resources rather than wasting them. The wasting phenomena makes the environment worse and worse. A large amount of paper is thrown away, and electricity is wasted everywhere.二、 要灵活运用虚拟句、倒装句、强调句、套用句型 和高级词汇等来增加文采. Not only is a large amount of paper thrown away,but also electricity is wasted everywhere.In a word, its high time we started things about conserving resources rather than wasting them. It is the wasting phenomena that makes the environment worse and worse. Tips for expanding the points into sentences:Group work (5 mins) Expand the points into sentences:Lets follow the third step:连- 添加过渡，确保连贯四、用过渡句连接段落三、用连词衔接一、把作目的状语的不定式置于句首二、把作状语的分词短语放在句首Tips for linking:五、开好头，结好尾To solve this problem, we suggest that restaurants should not use them again. 一、把作目的状语的不定式置于句首Tips for linking:二、把作状语的分词短语放在句首To save electricity, one shall turn on less light and turn air-conditioner one more degree up in summer and down in winter. Going to school or work by bike, we canhelp to save gasoline.三、用连词衔接Tips for linking:As far as Im concerned, As we all can see, Whats more, Whats worse, On the one hand, But on the other hand, In fact, Besides, Which,that,who, etc. Not onlybut also 四、用过渡句连接段落So how can we settle these problems? 五、开好头 We can see many throw-away chopsticks and bags in the restaurant. As we all can see, there are so many throw-away chops