【课件】2024浙江首考读后续写作文课件

读后续写2024届浙江省1月首考害怕长跑的“路痴”-实现小目标，完成大任务故事设定：高中的第一周可预判主题与“适应新环境”有关主要矛盾：findherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding在偌大的校园中容易迷路，感到陌生语言点：keeponesheadabovewater勉强维持清醒Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasix-storybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachersoffices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.困难：主人公Eva方向感差矛盾冲突点：自我设限，决定只记得教室，不探索学校的其余地方。Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonecommittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidntexist.支线任务：体育课上要求跑1公里，这也是Eva感到害怕和无法完成/做好的事。语言点：track跑道InherfirstP.E.class,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,“amile”wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfathers,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!先抑后扬，主人公预判自己一定是倒一，续写处可写出她取得了意料之外的成绩。语言点：edgeahead领先；beleftinthedust同学们都绝尘而去，她被落在后面WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.“Itsjustthebeginning,”shethought.“Illcomeinlastforsure.”情节进展：当Eva疲惫无法坚持时，她开始做自己的心里工作，把路程分解，每一次跑一段路，不知不觉就跑完4圈了。语言点：lap一圈SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword“mile.”Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadoweastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(拐弯).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldcompleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.主题语境：人与自我主题：成长类主题意义：超越自我话题：使用心术，克服恐惧Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.我们可以理解为面对问题找到方法实现成长。按照角色的成长历程，我们可以将其分为三部分：自我领悟自我蜕变。续写框架搭建(不唯一):Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Eva惊讶的内容具体解释CoachPitt和其他同学们都祝贺Eva，鼓掌鼓励Eva的反应:原来自已还可以这样做成功一件事情衔接Eva把这次成功经验和教学楼迷路联系起来Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Eva立刻开始行动结果通过这个方法，Eva终于熟悉了整个教学楼结尾升华从自我设限、路痴胆小到变得勇敢、不再路痴，顺利融入高中生活分句写作:Paragraphl:WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!toheratthefinishline.Evawas surpfisea.Eva惊讶的内容具体解释+CoachPitt和其他同学们都祝贺Eva，鼓掌鼓励思考:Eva具体惊讶什么呢?不知不觉中完成了比赛，还跑了不错的名次“CanitbetruethatIfinishedamileandwonthethirdprize?Ihavesurelynotbeendreaming haveI?Evamurmuredtoherself,disbelieflingeringuntilshesawCoachPittsthumbs-upand heardtheclaps.Eva的反应:原来自己还可以这样做成功一件事情“Imadeit!”shethought,amixofastonishmentandnewfoundconfidencesurgingthroughherbody.Afantasticfeeling.previouslyunfamiliar,tookrootinherheart.直接联系起来:Onherwaybacktotheclassroom,Evacouldntresistreplayinghervictory overthemileinthePEclass.Whensheapproachedthesix-storybuilding.sheslowedherpace,raisinghereyestotheoaktreesaround.Anideablossomedinhermind衔接Eva把这次成功经验和教学楼迷路联系起来Eva立刻开始行动思考:Eva具体会有哪些行动?不记具体的目标位置，相反，记路线中有趣的标志或者目标位置附近的有趣的标志，一步步完成任务Withoutdelay,shesprangintoaction.Duringthesubsequentweeks,the girldiscoveredaShakespearesculpturethatcouldserveasamarkerguidingher tothelibrary.Thelonghallwaydecoratedwithsomecelebritiespicturesleadingtothelaboratory andevenadistinctiveshapeofshadowneartheteachersofficesbecameadditionalcuesin herself-madetreasuremap结果通过这个方法，Eva终于熟悉了整个教学楼ItturnedoutthatwhenEvaleftthegrandmissionbehindandinsteadfocusedon observingthevarioussignsaround,thestructureoftheconstruction,asifbymagic,seemedto unfoldinhermindactively结尾升华从自我设限、路胆小到变得勇敢、不再路顺利融入高中生活Fromthenon,Eva,whohaddefeatedtheone-milerunandconqueredthesix-story monster,emergedwithnewfoundconfidence,readytoconfrontandovercomeotherchallengesinherlife.