读后续写:飞走的鸽子Word版
读后续写:飞走的鸽子题目:One Saturday afternoon, I was watching TV in the living room with my grandma when a blinding flash of lightning flashed across the sky, followed by a deafening sound, and the pictures on TV disappeared with that sound. Before I realized what had happened, a gray-white shadow rushed in through the open window and flew over my head. Bang! It hit the wall and slid off to the floor. Shaking with fear, I approached it cautiously and saw that it was a pigeon(鸽子). It looked at me in fear, trying to open its wings and struggling its feet, but apparently powerless.(闪电中,鸽子闯入我家)So I called my grandma and immediately set out to give it a helping hand. Taking it in my hands, I felt a few drops of warmth on my hands. It was blood! I gently spread its wings and there were a few red feathers inside. “Dont worry. Well get it out alive,” Grandma said to me. Then she got the first-aid kit. With some cotton, we dried the blood, cleaned the wound and then put it under a hairdryer to dry. All went smoothly, for the pigeon had no strength left to resist. There happened to be an empty birdcage at home, so I put it in gently and added a little water and some grains.(我和奶奶照顾受伤的鸽子)For the next few days, the moment I got home from school, I would run to feed the pigeon. And Grandma helped a lot, tidying up the cage daily. Little by little, its strength returned. One evening, I fed it with the biscuit I was eating. It enjoyed it! One week later, its wound almost healed; its feathers grew and it became brave. Whenever I sat at the table eating biscuits, it looked up at me, cooing (咕咕地叫) constantly. To my joy, I could also reach into the cage to touch it. When I gently fingered its head, it playfully pecked (啄) at me. Finally it completely recovered. But every time I was with it, it seemed restless in the cage. To make it happy and pretty, I tied an orange string around its leg.(鸽子完全恢复了,但是在笼中焦躁不安,我寄了一根绳子在它腿上)注意:1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2. 请在答题卡的相应位置作答。P1:One day, however, when I returned home, Grandma met me at the door, looking embarrassed.P2: Sure enough, I saw a pigeon flying into the house the next afternoon! 审题:P1:One day, however, when I returned home, Grandma met me at the door, looking embarrassed.但是一天,我回家时,奶奶在门口接我,看上去面色尴尬。Q:为什么尴尬?奶奶做了什么?在门口接我是为了及时向我解释什么?P2: Sure enough, I saw a pigeon flying into the house the next afternoon! 果然,第二天下午我看见一只鸽子飞进了房子。Q: 这是我之前救助过的鸽子吗?我怎么判断正是那只?它为什么飞“回”?前一天飞“走”了吗?怎么飞走的?跟奶奶面露尴尬有何联系?为什么用“果然”这个词?飞回来之后我做了什么?结局是怎样的?这个结局体现了“人与自然”主题中的具体哪个方面?范文:One day, however, when I returned home, Grandma met me at the door, looking embarrassed. 然而,有一天当我回家时,奶奶在门口接我,显得很尴尬。l 我问她发生了什么事。她转过身来,指着鸟笼,向我道歉说鸽子在她整理笼子时溜了出来,从打开的窗户飞走了。I asked her what had happened. She turned around and pointed to the birdcage, apologizing to me that the pigeon slid out when she was tidying up the cage and flew away through the open window. l 不见了!我简直不敢相信我的耳朵。我冲向鸟笼前。就是空的! Gone! I couldnt believe my ears. I rushed over to the birdcage. Just empty!l 我盯着剩下的水和谷物,眼泪顺着脸颊流下来。I stared at the remaining water and grains, tears streaming down my cheeks. l .“它去哪了?它会再次受伤吗?它会回来吗?.我哭着问奶奶。“Where has it gone? Will it be hurt again? Will it come back? .” I asked Grandma, sobbing. l “它会飞回来的!”她说服了我,轻轻地擦去了我的眼泪。“It will fly back!” she convinced me, wiping away my tears gentlySure enough, I saw a pigeon flying into the house the next afternoon! 果然,第二天下午我看见一只鸽子飞进了房子!l 它栖息在鸟笼附近,咕咕叫着。It perched near the birdcage, cooing. l 尽管非常兴奋,我还是悄悄地走近它。Despite great excitement, I approached it quietly. l 它是灰白色的,一条腿上系着一根橙色的绳子。我的鸽子回来了!It was gray-white and had an orange string tied to one leg. My pigeon came back! l “一定是饿了,”奶奶咧嘴笑了。我立刻用谷物喂它,然后踮起脚尖走到窗前,关上窗,催促奶奶把它关进笼子。“It must be hungry,” Grandma grinned. Immediately, I fed it with grains and then tiptoed to the window and closed it, urging Grandma to cage it. l 但她没有。“鸽子需要自由,”她耐心地向我解释说。But she didnt. “Pigeons need freedom,” she explained to me patiently. l 我很犹豫,但看着那只鸽子徘徊,平静地啄着谷物,我意识到奶奶是对的!我转向窗户,把它打开了。I was hesitant but looking at the pigeon wandering and pecking at the grains peacefully, I realized Grandma was right! I turned back to the window and opened it.读后续写评分标准总分为25分,按5个档次给分。第五档(21-25分)1. 与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理;2. 内容丰富,结构清晰,情节合理,语言流畅;3. 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确;4. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分)1. 与所给短文融洽度较高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理;2. 内容比较丰富,结构比较清晰,情节比较合理,语言流畅;3. 所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达;4. 比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。第三档(11-15分)1. 与所给短文关系较为密切,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接;2. 写出了若干有关内容,情节符合逻辑;3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求,虽有一些错误,但不影响意义的表达;4. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。第二档(6-10分)1. 与所给短文有一定的关系,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接;2. 写出了一些有关内容,有一定的故事情节;3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限,有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误,影响了意义的表达;4. 较少使用语句间的连接成分,全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档(1-5分)1. 与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差;2. 产出内容太少,故事情节不清晰;3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目很有限,有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误,严重影响了意义的表达;4. 缺乏语句间的连接成分,全文内容不连贯。0分白卷、内容太少无法判断或所写内容与所提供内容无关。学科网(北京)股份有限公司学科网(北京)股份有限公司