【课件】和爸爸骑马遇野兔读后续写讲评课课件

ContinuationwritingA Vacation Like Never BeforeItwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatustoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydadsfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveustohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.一.输入标题story页码1Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasntgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountain.“Dontbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudontgetlost!”“OK!”Mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmwereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.trackn.pathorroughroad,esponemadebyvehicles,peopleoranimals路,小径（尤指车辆人或动物造成的一.输入标题story页码2故事情节页码3一.输入标题概要页码4MydadtreatedmetoaspecialsummervacationinUnclePaulsfarmintheWildWest,whereIexperiencedmyfirsthorse-ridingwithmyfatherscompany.一.输入标题续写页码6 Paragaph1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse._Paragraph 2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark._The content(内容内容)of paragraph 1:How did we get lost?The contentof paragraph 2:How did we find our way back?路上遇到一只兔子我们迷路了*续写思路第一段关注第一段的首句+第二段的首句（第二段的首句通常是第一段故事的结果）第一段首句：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.第二段首句：We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.因果关系:思路:因为兔子的突然出现，我们迷路了。兔子的出现导致了什么结果？*情节总结已知情节我和爸爸到西部荒野，体验农村生活，我看到骑马觉得很酷，感到好奇，并最终获准和爸爸一起骑马去山里。本课内容单击此处输入你的正文，文字是您思想的提炼，为了最终演示发布的良好效果，请尽量言简意赅的阐述观点；根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者可以准确理解您所传达的信息。单击此处输入你的正文，文字是您思想的提炼，为了最终演示发布的良好效果，请尽量言简意赅的阐述观点；根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者可以准确理解您所传达的信息。未知情节兔子突然出现后发生了什么？如何找到回到农场的路？最终回到保罗叔叔家了吗？*分析故事情节、线索课程导入IntroductionRisingactionClimaxResolutionFallingactionDad and I went to the west and experienced a life on the farm(excited)I went on a horse ride with Dad(overjoyed)A rabbit jumped out(nervous?excited?)We got lost(worried)We found our way home or not(thrilled?frustrated?)We reached the farm or not(relieved?frightened?)首句精研：首句精研：研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？Para.1:Suddenly a little rabbit ran in front of my horse.Para.2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.1.How did they get lost?2.Where did the horses carry them?3.How did they feel about and deal with the situation?1.Did they eventually make it back to the farm house?2.How did they get back?3.How did they feel?提问*分析文章细节My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.“Dont be late for supper,”Uncle Paul cried,“and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!There was a river nearby.(Para 4)So,my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats,got on ourhorses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.The writer and his father were on different horses.*A rabbit jumped out.I chased the rabbit.因果关系:因为兔子的突然出现，我们迷路了。思路:兔子的出现导致了什么结果？My horse panicked and ran away.We got lost.We got lost.We found our way home by following the river.Uncle Paul came to take us home.We returned to the farm.一.输入标题Logic页码7 1.How did they get lost?2.Where did the horses carry them?3.How did they feel about and deal with the situation?1.Did they eventually make it back to the farm house?2.How did they get back?3.How did they feel?*首句呼应上文中间刻画细节尾句衔接过渡首句呼应上文中间刻画细节尾句萃章显志向The horse got scared or.XXXThe things I and my father did XXX/feltWe got lost.I feel fear when got lostsaydofeelfinally got home，unforgettable experience Para1Para2Para1Para21.1.时间表达时间表达2.2.情感表达情感表达3.3.心理活动；心理活动；4.4.动作描写；动作描写；5.5.事件及经过；事件及经过；6.6.感悟；感悟；7.7.可套用的句式。可套用的句式。Justthen,=Justatthatmoment正在那时正在那时扩写句子扩写句子1.我追着兔子跑我追着兔子跑2.马跑的很快马跑的很快3.我不想摔下马我不想摔下马4.爸爸让我平静下来爸爸让我平静下来5.我不想马伤到兔子我不想马伤到兔子 6.爸爸想到方法爸爸想到方法7.看灯光，我们感到激动。看灯光，我们感到激动。8.我感到特别害怕我感到特别害怕.9.我希望我们不会看到饿狼。我希望我们不会看到饿狼。翻译翻译1.我追着兔子跑我追着兔子跑我毫不犹豫地追着兔子跑我毫不犹豫地追着兔子跑从来没有见过这么可爱的动物以至于我毫不犹豫地追着她。从来没有见过这么可爱的动物以至于我毫不犹豫地追着她。IhadneverinlifeseensolovelyacreaturethatIchaseditwithouthesitation.NeverbeforeinmylifehadIseensolovelyacreaturethatIchaseditwithouthesitation/thinkingtwice.so.that.如此如此.以至于以至于.never倒装句倒装句翻译翻译2.马跑的很快马跑的很快马被吓所以跑的很快马被吓所以跑的很快我的马吓得跑得比我想象的还快。我的马吓得跑得比我想象的还快。MyhorsewassostartledthatitranfasterthanIcouldimagine.SostartledwasmyhorsethatitranfasterthanIcouldimagine.so.that.倒装句倒装句翻译翻译3.我不想摔下马我不想摔下马我努力保持平衡不让自己掉下马我努力保持平衡不让自己掉下马尽管我很害怕，我努力保持平衡不让自己掉下马。尽管我很害怕，我努力保持平衡不让自己掉下马。ThoughIwasfrightened,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.FrightenedasIwas,Itrie